Does she?

10/25/13

 

 

 

I heard you're dating someone

a girl just caught your eye

Tell me about this new love

the cause of your "Goodbye".

 

Does she greet you good morning

with breakfast in your bed?

Does she know your fav'rite songs

and sing them in her head?

 

Does she kiss you 'til you're breathless

and treat you like a prince?

Does she keep all your love letters,

not throwing them in bins?

 

Does she sing in the shower

and waltz on the floor?

Does she fix your black necktie

and wave bye from the door?

 

Does she pack up your lunch

a sandwich with a note?

Does she send you thoughtful texts

an "I love you" and a quote?

 

Does she understand your hobbies

the cigars and the games?

Does she also love your friends

the quirks behind the names?

 

Does she miss you when you're gone

and wait 'til you're back?

Does she offer better things

all the things that I lack?

 

Does she love you like I did

or does she love you even more?

And baby, does she even know

she has all I'm wishing for?

 

 

Author's Note

I missed rhymes. :)

Reviews

[Inda]

Sweet and honest, great job!

[Blue]

Thank you!

[rutherford]

Transports me back in time -- feeling I've been there many times.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

I thought it is just us girls who can relate this piece. Haha, thanks, Rutherford. :)

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

*relate to this piece

[Einstein Noodle]

if you have missed rhymes i didnt notice at all.. very smooth read; well thought out; and your point made... love and loosing... a timeless game :(
E.

[Blue]

Thank you!

[David]

very nice :) keep up the good work

[Chandradhish Ghosh]

Hey nice use of questions and repetitions...flows well too...

[sayed Mudasir Ali]

My dear ! Not too many people are happy to be straight. Unconditional and pure love which leads to heaven and that communication which is bonded in between people. Your poem is entirely based on someone who has cheated or betrayed.

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the use of repetition in the poem. The question led the reader into good questions and thoughts. I tell people. Be careful what you wish for. What you left behind could of been precious gold and you left for dried up dirt and lies. I like the ending. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[poetdoug]

Your colorfully crafted poem has great rhythm---so rhyme is certainly never missed.
Well done

[Pryde Foltz]

I hear you. Great write, Blue.