Does she?

10/25/13

 

 

 

I heard you're dating someone

a girl just caught your eye

Tell me about this new love

the cause of your "Goodbye".

 

Does she greet you good morning

with breakfast in your bed?

Does she know your fav'rite songs

and sing them in her head?

 

Does she kiss you 'til you're breathless

and treat you like a prince?

Does she keep all your love letters,

not throwing them in bins?

 

Does she sing in the shower

and waltz on the floor?

Does she fix your black necktie

and wave bye from the door?

 

Does she pack up your lunch

a sandwich with a note?

Does she send you thoughtful texts

an "I love you" and a quote?

 

Does she understand your hobbies

the cigars and the games?

Does she also love your friends

the quirks behind the names?

 

Does she miss you when you're gone

and wait 'til you're back?

Does she offer better things

all the things that I lack?

 

Does she love you like I did

or does she love you even more?

And baby, does she even know

she has all I'm wishing for?

 

 

Author's Note

I missed rhymes. :)

Reviews

[J. Kell]

Great job with the rhyme scheme! I enjoyed reading this, definitely his loss :) lol

[Blue]

Thank you!

[Mark Heathcote]

This was beautifully executed throughout, much enjoyed read, thanks for sharing.

[Blue]

Thank you!

[Tate Morgan]

This one is a very well produced poem.I like it But of course i am partial to rhyme and meter

[Blue]

Thank you!

[SHEEMA HUQ]

This is very nicely executed

[Blue]

Thank you!

[Rayne]

fits every broken hearted girl

[Blue]

Thank you!

[WILDERNESS]

lovely poem..................... and BTW no such girl exists , not even in computer games....... :)

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Hahaha, I think you just haven't found one. :)

[WILDERNESS]

HAHAHA where should i be looking...?

[Aziz Luther]

This is nice. I loved this poem especially the ending. "Does she even know, she has all I'm wishing for."
Love it

[Blue]

Thank you!

[Tom]

The answers are futile if love has eroded and subsided !

A somber verse & rhyme, tactfully penned !

[Blue]

Thank you!

[Anand Sehgal]

wonderful character detailing and story-building through questions ! :) loved it very much

[Blue]

Thank you!

[MsJewel]

I think we've all been there at one time or another Blue - I know I have anyway.

I love the wonderful rhyme and flow of your poem. It's so simple and yet so effective. Great work!

:) Julie

[Blue]

Thank you!