runaway

door locked behind
walk quietly in
take a left then a right

 

that lingering smell
we wish to forget
yet so hard to when
empty bottels just lay
scattered across the floor

 

unoticed so far, your safe
dont get caught
for you know whats next

 

just great...

you didnt see it

and kicked a bottel

you made noise

 

screwed up
once again
another mistake
start agian

 

grab hold of it
time to go
let the blood flow
let everything go

Author's Note

meepz

Reviews

[Call Me Blu]

I'm sure he'll forgive you when he reads this. It could use some stronger language but it painted a perfect picture while hinting at a story. The words flowed very well and created the right mood.

[November Gold]

A very real picture that you painted here. Made me a little sad. Good write

[Jonathan Ballam]

A simple and powerful write, to those feelings many of us squash with a bottle of liquor. The first paragraph was particularly interesting ;)

[Hotwater]

Hits the spot, feels so 'dark'
regards.

[ScaryTrees]

hard stuff
good work but watch the typos
"again" ;)

[light and ashes]

Very nice poem. I really enjoyed reading it.

[dreaming dame]

Love it. Title is perfect:)

[Samantha Heaton]

Relate to this so much...

[DontBlink158]

Great work, very real and open. I liked it

[JennaMarie]

Very interesting, the subject matter seems very real and relates well to the reader. Your stanzas are great and divide the poem up well. Great job!