runaway

door locked behind
walk quietly in
take a left then a right

 

that lingering smell
we wish to forget
yet so hard to when
empty bottels just lay
scattered across the floor

 

unoticed so far, your safe
dont get caught
for you know whats next

 

just great...

you didnt see it

and kicked a bottel

you made noise

 

screwed up
once again
another mistake
start agian

 

grab hold of it
time to go
let the blood flow
let everything go

Author's Note

meepz

Reviews

[Daytonight]

I liked how you used this bottle in the poem. Well penned. Great brevity. Keep up the awesome work.

[Rene Velez]

wow, pretty tough write, gingerly in its way but dead serious...

[theopenbook]

nice:) i know the feeling of trying to escape and then screwing up:) love it:)

[Keevan]

Nicely done, wonderful write.

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

really nice write here, you seem to write well from your feelings :)

[silentpoet]

You seem to write from your heart.. very nicely done!

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Short sentences enhance the poem so much. Love it:)

[Sukriti Suki]

Nice!

[brenda]

nice poem !

[Eile MacIntyre]

I like the twist in the poem.