Confetti Kisses

catpcha says - ex curse

Sweet jasmine, how love let me down,

confetti kisses in my hair.

A trail of sorrow, web of lies,

a hopeless castle in the air.

Beneath your bending branches I

walk carefree on a breezy day

recalling how I wed too young

and in the merry month of May.

But merry didn't persevere,

as melting moments faded fast.

My heart, my hopes, my dreams for us,

a silent graveyard in the past.

And all that loving went to waste,

with promises that were not kept.

The wretched heartache, sleepless nights,

a lake from all the tears I wept.

From time to time our paths still cross,

though years have eased that bitter pain.

I see him through a stranger's eyes

yet treachery has left its stain.

Reviews

[Poetic Beauty]

Sometimes when you get married young as people grow and change a rift between two people happens instead of growing together over time.

This poem conveys the emotional toll it takes on a person when the hopes and dreams are shattered with the loss of not only love but a partner and lover.

[Chris Shaw]

My parents married very young and had a hugely successful marriage. Sadly if you marry someone who turns out to be selfish, it doesn't matter what age you are. Yes, the toll can be huge, especially when it comes to trust issues. Many thanks PB for checking this old poem out. You are appreciated.

Chris

[Poetic Beauty]

You are welcome. When one person is selfish it never ends well.

[Shelley Warner]

Oh, how very sad. I like the imagery and I like that you write about emotions. "Confetti kisses" is very descriptive.

[Chris Shaw]

Many thanks Shelley for visiting this old poem, out for an airing. I appreciate you stopping by.
read moreMany thanks Shelley for visiting this old poem, out for an airing. I appreciate you stopping by.

Chris

[Jimmy Yetts]

So hauntingly beautiful it almost makes me regret not having had more lost loves.
Compelling poetry, Chris; undeniably, work of a very high order.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Jimmy, I appreciate your visits. Hope all is good with you.

Chris

[matelotrod]

Ouch, been there, done that and in truth made a much better choice years later. I have actually treated as a learning process where we eventually learn. I refer to my first marriage as an apprentice-ship. Seems to have worked as I finally earned an award regarding partnerships. better stop there, loved your version both in meaning and writing. Well done, we have all done silly things but marriage can be the most painful. Take care Rod

[Chris Shaw]

What a good way of thinking. An apprenticeship, that makes me feel better. I certainly learned much from a huge mistake. Thank you Rod.

Chris

[matelotrod]

My first marriage was because I was a young lad in the Navy and when I came on leave most of my school buddies were getting wed, I foolishly followed suit as I thought that was what you had to do!! Good learning method. PS I never proposed as I thought the ring was just a present!

[Ardra]

The wretched heartache, sleepless nights,
a lake from all the tears I wept...

That sums it up....

Time does heal ...guess the stains remain as a memory ....

Love the captcha... heheh sometimes it feels like it's matching our poems mood ... in one word... ;)

Sending you warm (( hugs))

[Chris Shaw]

Captcha was hilarious Ardra. Yes, time is a healer, but it doesn't appear so when you are going through this sort of agony. And I do say agony and mean it. Thank you so much.

Chris

[Ardra]

Very true....

It feels like you can't breathe during those times...I guess we survive .... each in our own special ways...

[Chris Shaw]

We have to find our own ways, but it can be done, and we learn lessons as well:)

[Ardra]

I guess we do.... and they come along to teach us something ...that's what I belive...even if it hurts.....maybe we will smile we could be alive even though we have seen worse...(hugs)

[lightsong]

that's beyond amazing, from the flow, to the expressions, the rhythm, the emotions, and the title! what's more sadly enchanting that it? I feel the innocence being stolen then lost, a young heart being ripped without completely being repaired, You are truly amazing dear Chris, and I always see You as a great novelist, You have such a fine pen speaking to us with a most smoothing language.

[Chris Shaw]

Dear Light, thank you so much for the great compliments you have bestowed on me. I truly appreciate your kind words and your visits. Take care and all good wishes.

Chris

[Gaurav]

This is a very profound write, taking us through moments of solace to life of sadness. Such an awesome read. Thank you for sharing Chris.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Gaurav. Yes it was a sad time, but time is a great healer. Thank you so much for your visit.

Chris

[barleygirl]

Your poem conjures up intense feelings of hope & disappointment, as it often happens in some relationships. This conventional dream of "forever" was never mine, so it's interesting to see how other people view this kind of letdown in life. Your writing is always very realistic, even for someone who hasn't been there before. Your title (which I love) threw me off, causing me to expect a more upbeat love story, tho! (((HUGS))) fondly, Margie

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Margie. Brought up to expect happy ever afters. First ever divorce in my family. Huge lessons learned. Thank you.

Fondest

Chris

[grimfukle]

"I see him through a stranger's eyes"
Tragic but true.
Nicely done.

[Chris Shaw]

Thanks, an oldie out for an airing.

Chris

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

A lake from all the tears I wept
what a beautiful thought you had writing that
that is gorgeous
as is your whole poem well done

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Julie for your lovely response. Truly appreciated.

Chris x

[Einstein Noodle]

damn this is good Christine! i feel the angst ... and know the journey ... i think perhaps those kinds of heartbreaks are the first building blocks of real love in our lives ... seem we all get raked over them and drag others through them as well ;{ finding love .... oh the price we pay eh! i really like this one .. its a mirror and tightly packed and so very relatable .. nice job ma'am!
E.
ps. love the title too ...its perfect!

[Chris Shaw]

Hello Mr E. Thank you so much for your visit. You are so right, that kind of heartbreak is indeed the building blocks or foundations for future love which is built to last and doesn't crumble at the first hurdle. Hard price to pay, wouldn't want to experience that again. Pleased you enjoyed the title too :))

Chris

[Einstein Noodle]

me either Christine ... once is way more than enough ... seems we are both fortunate not to have needed another dose! ;)

[Chris Shaw]

You know that expression, "once bitten, twice shy?" Waited quite a while before I was tempted again :))