Absent Stars

Absent Stars

A Poem by Chris Shaw

And who has swept the stars away
not one remains in sight?
Too eager with their bristle brush
they've cleaned the sky at night.
So all those clustered gems I love
which give me peace of mind,
are huddled in an unknown place
that torchlight can not find.

A canvas stretches end to end
devoid of silver light.
The moon has left, those sparklers gone
will no one hear my plight?
If I should ask or make a wish
or plead for compromise,
will someone spare two tiny stars
and place them in my eyes?

© 2018 Chris Shaw


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Taken literally, I too miss the stars. I remember when young going to the mountains with no outside light and seeing so many stars, now all gone due to light pollution. But figuratively, I feel that the present has taken the stars from our eyes with its form of light pollution. Nicely done Chris.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chris Shaw

1 Year Ago

Thank you Soren. I appreciate the thoughts you have shared here. All the best.

Chris.. read more



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We see the future in the horizon, and the past in stars (when we see a star, we actually see its image from minutes ago). And seeing how watching the stars reminded you of your past and childhood, I liked to make that other point of view.
We often use stars as metaphors to defeat darkness, but it seems as if the light defeated the stars and it is more darker than ever. The lights of modern life, cities and screens, have gradually took over nature and enjoying its element and we became like robots, dead and dark from the inside despite all the lights. Enjoying nature (silent walks, starring at stars, hugging big trees) call them whims, but they are survival elements, energisers, an escape, a way to express gratitude, a source of light.
So, keep holding onto life that existed before tech, when you could watch stars.

Your poem stroke ideas in my mind and I came up with this philosophical point of view, sorry.
Very nice poem, the last two lines... are the best epilogue ever!

Posted 2 Days Ago


Missing the stars and moonlight on a cloudy night is beautifully inked in this very lovely poem.
I love the final two lines of the poem! You are a visionary, dear Chris. With lovely nocturnal imagery you paint a moonless, starless sky very effectively. I like this poem very much and thank you for sharing it, dear poetess. Wishing you a very lovely evening and hope later that you enjoy a beautiful starlit sky by the light of a big silvery moon...

Posted 2 Days Ago


Someone has taken the stars away. I remember African skies shimmering with stars.

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chris Shaw

10 Months Ago

Thank you Sharrumkin. We do not see the stars so often now. Sadly light pollution has blotted them o.. read more
dear Chris… I love 💗 the ending…. It seems we have not had Stars for quite some time. softly, Pat

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chris Shaw

10 Months Ago

Dear Pat, please forgive the lateness of my response. Pleased you enjoyed this older write of mine. .. read more
Yes... stars indeed.

Good poetry!

Sharp and cutting edge... right to the point!

;)

Posted 1 Year Ago


Chris Shaw

1 Year Ago

Many thanks for your visit and review. Pleased you stopped by.

Chris
The_Ancient_Rock

1 Year Ago

You are welcome.
Wow, this is an awesome piece of work. Now I am thoroughly embarrassed that you have taken the time to read the drivel I write. I just saw the little dipper the other night and I cant remember seeing anything but low altitude satellites, or high altitude drones around here. By the way tonights full moon was a wonderful sight .


Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chris Shaw

1 Year Ago

I do not deserve all that praise you have bestowed on me but thank you so much for your visit and co.. read more
Taken literally, I too miss the stars. I remember when young going to the mountains with no outside light and seeing so many stars, now all gone due to light pollution. But figuratively, I feel that the present has taken the stars from our eyes with its form of light pollution. Nicely done Chris.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chris Shaw

1 Year Ago

Thank you Soren. I appreciate the thoughts you have shared here. All the best.

Chris.. read more
Excellent Work Chris. 'Wish upon a Star'. 'We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the Stars'. Nicely phrased and well put together.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chris Shaw

1 Year Ago

Good morning Tony. Many thanks for your lovely review. Have a great day.

Chris
Good morning dear Chris,
I am finally back after over 5 long weeks of being quite ill.
So excited to be reading my favorite poets words.
This one of yours is so clever. Love the whole poem.
The words moved along so easily.
Really good!!
Lisa, now back to reading, and reviewing in Spain

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chris Shaw

1 Year Ago

Thanks Lisa fur your review. Happy new year to you. Sorry to hear you have been ill. Hoping by now y.. read more
Lisasview

1 Year Ago

Still dealing with this but I am well enough to be on the computer...finally..
I just posted .. read more
That was really nice Chris, though to lose the stars is a sad thought. But I guess clouds could do that as well and the good thing is, the clouds will eventually disappear, and your beloved stars will be found right where they have always been and if not, I am sure I have a few spare stars sitting around somewhere I would be happy to give to you.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chris Shaw

1 Year Ago

Thank you for your generous review will. An older poem out for an airing.

Chris

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