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Under Wraps

Under Wraps

A Poem by Christine Anne Shaw
"

(whether you are nine or twenty nine, a prize is a prize)

"
when the music stopped abruptly
do you recall a certain exhilaration
from that rotating parcel landing
into your eager lap

how your heart skipped a beat
you were all fingers and thumbs
while you sat cross legged
your feet positioned east west

when you had only seconds left
to peel off a layer of old broadsheet
thick with sixties blackened print
before the stylus hit the groove

on it moved, how smudges played
on fingertips and palms resembled
the Black sea but you didn't care
your spirits were up in the air

you knew you were in with a chance
you knew you had a possibility
of gaining a prize, so your eyes stayed
focused and bright

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fast forward at Rebecca's bar
he was at the far end, sending more
than smoke signals my way

easy to read messages on display
his eyes strayed into the floral
curves and folds of my best dress

dark lengthy eye lashes tickled 
my cheek from a distance away
i felt an absent kiss on my neck

then he edged his way through
the throng, nearer and nearer
he caught the sigh of my breath

    the rest is under wraps

© 2020 Christine Anne Shaw


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Hay, where's part three of this OBVIOUS trilogy, where the wrap is unwrapped?
Stop leaving it to our imagination Chris, if I wanted to think I'd read some fake news.
And that's before I even mention the fact you didn't tell us what was in the parcel... Is this a surreal poem? 😀
I once won a bottle of whisky and pack of cigarettes and lighter at pass ghe parcel... I was 8! Pre health and safety. Mum didn't bat an eyelid, but seemed quite happy later that night, sleeping in the clothes hamper 😀

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lorry

1 Week Ago

Just discovered Galaxy caramel... It's obscenely good. 😀
Christine Anne Shaw

1 Week Ago

Now you are rubbing salt into an open wound. I can't have dairy :(( boo hoo. Maybe I'll get him indo.. read more
Lorry

1 Week Ago

Oopsy, me bad. Nom nom nom 🤭



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Ah, yes, the rest is under wraps......keep us guessing, Chris. This was a great story. Anticipation, build up....oh, the romance and the sparks! "his eyes strayed into the floral curves and folds of my best dress" what a great line! I could picture the scene. Loved it. Lydi**

Posted 5 Days Ago


Chris - I've been away for a bit. I've been finishing up a novel that I'm trying now to get published.
I'm glad I got back in time to read this. I really like it. I don't think I've ever seen anything like this from you before. I'll have to get caught up on the other writings of yours' that I've missed.

Take care and be safe. Our "Idiot" is still not making it mandatory that people ar least wear masks. Dave

Posted 6 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Christine Anne Shaw

5 Days Ago

Good luck with your novel Dave. We now have to wear masks in shops and on public transport. I have b.. read more
Dear Chris... a very clever Title and ending.
Definitely my Favorite. A Bar is an excellent place to share your instincts and discover and embrace a Guy with a Tear. I did and we rescued each other. The Salvation Army has
embraced many Tears when people have lost their way... and thereby touched their Spirit.
“Your heart skipped a Beat... before the Stylus
hit the Groove.” We must not be so Heaven bent that we are no earthly good. tenderly, Pat

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Christine Anne Shaw

1 Week Ago

Thank you Pat for your lovely review. My heart certainly did skip a beat and the rest is our history.. read more
I tried find common sense at this le fontaine of your aurora in highest vibrations. But i gave up. It's just wonderful imagination with perspective of tragic existentialism . At that case my mind give me this explanations. Maybe it's record of secret date in between Colin Wilson and Iris Murdoch .

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Christine Anne Shaw

1 Week Ago

Thank you Martin. Your response made me smile. This poem was about feelings of excitement faced in t.. read more
Martin ?

1 Week Ago

I member when i was child feels of exhilarating was sometimes much better then prize itself. Special.. read more
The first part had me thinking what a delightful subject for a poem. And then I read the second part and immediately thought a delight with extra layers of meaning. Wonderful Christine.

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Christine Anne Shaw

1 Week Ago

Many thanks Ken for your thoughts. Lovely to have a visit from you. All the best.

Chr.. read more
there is so much more i want to know about this ... glad i read your interaction with Lorry and found out what a "parcel" is ... the setting is still a bit unclear ... but i see a young lady receiving the book ... i understand the black ink transfer .. i use to be a paper boy ;) she's listening to a favorite record, i think ... but the 60 seconds, tho seems important ... i don't know why?? love the sharp transition of time, scene and form ...all works for me! ... classy, sensual yet oh so bar room .... and ya gotta love that closing line .. you devil you! ..leaving everyong hanging like that :)))))))))))))))) peace girl!

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Christine Anne Shaw

1 Week Ago

Dear Mr E. When we were kids we played pass the parcel at parties. It was really exciting. The prize.. read more
Einstein Noodle

6 Days Ago

ahhhhh what a great party game for kids!! i feel my life is lacking now ;) ...maybe Norma will play .. read more
You created that feeling of anticipation, excitement, exhilaration. This poem hit all the reward centres in my brain. I just loved this read. Life can be so beautiful indeed.

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Pestonjee

1 Week Ago

I agree with you...despite of all the trials and travails, life is worth it and its great to be aliv.. read more
Christine Anne Shaw

1 Week Ago

Have a great day :)
Pestonjee

1 Week Ago

You too dear friend :)
The times and settings may be different, but the anticipation of possibilities is quite similar. A prize is a prize, whether we choose to display the trophies or not.

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Christine Anne Shaw

1 Week Ago

Many thanks John for your thoughts on prizes through the ages.

Chris

.......... This is so tastefully and subtly hot.. one might go as far as to suggest doubly hot... clever too I may add............. makes me wanna cast both me eyes into the floral curves and folds of your best frock... just wish I could be more subtle sometimes :)

Neville

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

1 Week Ago


Hey .. I struggle opening a window these daze, neva mind climbing a mountain..

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Christine Anne Shaw

1 Week Ago

You be hanging around ladies loos then my friend :)))
Neville

1 Week Ago


not for a very long time..
Tease.
I suppose one could interpret this as quite elegant, playfully soft, erotica.
Guess I'll exemplify the gentleman my mama raised me to be and go with the elegance.
Besides, it suits you and your poetry, rather nicely.



Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Christine Anne Shaw

1 Week Ago

Thank you Jimmy for your lovely review. Elegance will do very nicely.

Chris

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Christine Anne Shaw
Christine Anne Shaw

Berkshire, United Kingdom



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Have been at Writerscafe for a year now, so pleased I made the change to posting my work here. Have loved reading poetry all my life, but never wrote my first poem until I hit 40. I wish now that I.. more..

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