The Prayer

I close my eyes and pray to God

Hoping that He hears my cries

Demons have tried to bring me down

I wont give in to all their tries

 

Help me push these demons away

They are trying to steal my lonely soul

Everyday they mysteriously appear

Dancing toward hell with lives they’ve stole

 

My faith is strong, cannot be broken

I know you’re always by my side

I wont give in to sinful temptations

I cannot hand these demons my life

 

So I close my eyes and pray to God

Hoping that He hears my plea

That if tomorrow I do not wake

Find my soul and set me free

 

Author's Note

Please review and comment :)

Reviews

[Tessa Danielle Guise]

Aaron that was very good! Just to tell you something. God is always here for you. He knows you need him before you pray... He can read our minds. He is our Father & he knows when we are in pain or just really lonely. He might not talk to you one on one. But he does answer you... It might be in a dream or something happens that will help you make the right choses. I know this is coming from a 15 year old. But alot has happened in my life in the last 7 years... I know how it feels to be lonley, afraid, and down right depressed.... Aaron I wish you the best in your life.. Stay strong & keep your eyes open for God's answers.... It might happen a few years from now... But i know something goods gonna come out of this! ♥

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much.... I know He hears my prayers and my words :) Thank you

[Tessa Danielle Guise]

No problem!!! ♥ I'm always here to share the word of God... Thats my duty..lol

[SquinklaPsyOps]

The Angels represent positive presence which are the souls that made it to Heaven and

I really like your poem

It speaks as it should and describes what many fear to disclose that

Lost ghosts presence do not represent positive which signifies that lost ghosts presence that didnt make it to Heaven represent the devil and those are the lost souls that were rejected by Heaven

And that is the reason ghosts stalk and whisper nonsene to persons because the lost ghosts want to try to deviate persons from making it to Heaven

I really think the demons are very dumb because they were rejected by Heaven

And your poem talks about not letting the demons tag along because the demons want to try to possess live persons because the dead burnt demons want to try to steal a new vehicle to try to infiltrate Heaven

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much for the review :) I am glad you understood what I was trying to get across in this poem... glad you liked it :)

[ANTO]

Dark and yet full of the light of faith Aaron.
I have to say, this line - "Everyday they mysteriously appear Dancing toward hell with lives they’ve stole.."
was uber-creepy and fired the scariest images off in my mind's eye.
Its a prayer, a plea and a tale - well crafted

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much! That was a line that stuck out to me that I liked because it paints the picture of these demons just playing games just trying to steal your soul as they happily dance back to hell with your soul... oblivious to the hearts they just broke and the life they just ruined. Thanks for the review my friend!

[ANTO]

i wouldnt say they were oblivious - probably more like they understand that those left behind with broken lives are more likely to fall by the wayside so they'll be back for them later - one life ruined then affetcs more and more lives like a cancer. You painted that so well my friend. Kudos.!

[Princ3ss_26]

Very beautiful piece. I find it to be peaceful and inspirational as if you are confirming that you will not turn the other cheek here. You stand for your beliefs.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Katherine! I definitely do stand for my beliefs and each day is a step forward... a step toward strong faith :) Thanks for the review

[Princ3ss_26]

You are most welcome. I look forward to more pieces of your work. :)

[AaronFreitas]

Aww thanks! I appreciate that :) I see you are from New York! I'm jealous

[Princ3ss_26]

No problem. :) why are you jealous? Lol

[AaronFreitas]

I love New York! I've only been there once but I loved it... plus I'm a Yankee fan so I would love to pick up and move to New York :)

[Princ3ss_26]

Awww ok cool.

[Devanshu Rajput]

A prayer to get rid of satanic souls, Bravo! I can see the efforts employed by you to overcome the darkness.

I liked the ABCB rhyme scheme. You really have done an applaudable job. I must say, it is a letter to Almighty, rather than a poem.

May, God hear your clamour.

My best wishes,
Devanshu

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much. I also just learned about ABCB rhyme scheme haha... I usually just write I am not too familiar with all the poetry rules but rhyming is something I like to do :) Thanks my friend!

[wordman]

a great write about our never ending battle against satan

[AaronFreitas]

It's a daily battle.... thanks for the review!

[wordman]

don`t need to tell me I live it every day my friend,your welcome

[AaronFreitas]

I am glad you understand brotha... stay strong!

[wordman]

I have bumps and bruises but I put up a good fight but when the dust settles I am his son and he is my lord

[AaronFreitas]

Very nice... at the end of the day that's all that matters :) He see's deep into our hearts and souls

[Tinotenda Nyevedzanai]

I love this, excellent play on punctuation a wonderful flow and an uplifting spiritual content. Well Done!!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Ally :)

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

This is powerful in message and meaning. I can clearly picture and feel a person in great hopelessness surrounded by pure darkness, but looking up to see a little light shinning above and praying to it (or rather God) to relinquish one's soul from suffering.

It is a wonderful write, but I feel that a few stanzas have a flow that sounds a bit broken. Stanzas one and four flow perfectly, but third and fourth feel a bit cluttered. But otherwise, I thought it was great!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much. I admit it was tough trying to say exactly what I wanted to say with a perfect flow... I have a habit of when I read out loud I make it flow since I understand in my mind where the I'm going with it but I know it's something I do that I can improve on :) Thank you for the review Nadia ;)

[Ana B.]

Beautifullly worded, a fine tribute for the inner strength one must posses in order to survive, after all the trials never end do they?

[AaronFreitas]

They really never do end... there is constant struggle and always distractions, poisons and evil trying to bring us down in this world. Inner strength is what we can control and it's important to keep that focus. Thank you Ana always good seeing you on here :)

[Mary Bradley]

That if tomorrow I do not wake
Find my soul and set me free .

My favorite lines Aaron Freitas :-) ... heartfelt and beautiful prayer

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Mary.... I appreciate you stopping by and commenting :)

[sereenaoutloud]

Love this fight against temptation. Your writing is always so open and honest. Really great piece.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much... honesty is my favorite... mine as well be true to ourselves :)