Rusted Mechanical Heart

Just an old sappy stupid love poem.

By Deviantart

Rusted Mechanical Heart

 

A rusted-mechanical heart

Sits in an antique chest

Alone in darkness

It waits

(Patiently)

 

Its gears worn from abuse

Broken from disrepair

Loves oil spent

It binds

(Painfully)

 

Its once gleaming-golden interior

Now tarnished insecurities

Awaits the chance

To shine

(Again)

 

All it requires is affectionate polishing

A little TLC will do just fine

To fire her up again

This time

(For Good)

 

The key is already in the lock

Slowly open it right back up

Place it in your hands

&

Love it

(Forever)

Reviews

[Aethereal]

This mechanical clock is dividing time as it hungers for moments of endearment. There must be a good reason for it to be aware of the passing of time. “It waits (patiently)” in anticipation of purpose. This poem has a beautiful free verse structure where each line is like the passionate tick of this clock.

[Chris Micha]

Thank you for that amazing review. You have such an philisophical view of the world and thst's beautiful!

[Quill~]

This is infectious. I love the little pieces that shine, and this is one of them.
A favorite from you so far. :)

[Chris Micha]

Wow thank you so much, Quill. I never really thought of this one as being that great, so I am truly honored you would think so!! :)

[Quill~]

:) we always doubt the ones that display our honest thoughts, it leaves us open and vulnerable. this one is special.

[Chris Micha]

Thank you so much :)

[Quill~]

:) a pleasure :)

[MagicAl]

Love the metaphor used. Lovely little poem (not sappy or stupid as you'd described!)

[Chris Micha]

Thank you MagicAl...means a lot!!

[MsJewel]

Sappy and stupid - I disagree! I found this heartfelt and touching...perhaps I'm the one who is a bit sappy...regardless... I love it!

:) Julie

[Chris Micha]

Maybe we both are Julie ;) thank you sweets!!

[Madalyn Beck]

I love the mechanical aspect of this and how you worked it perfectly into the truest and deepest functions of a broken and mending heart. Beautifully written. One of my favorites for sure! I couldn't get enough of it! xo (:

[Chris Micha]

Awe you are so sweet Madalyn! It's such a pleasure to hear from you. :)

[lost girl]

If only time and love were that easy......endearing piece...makes me wanna crack it open and hit the restart button....if only...

[Chris Micha]

I wish it were that easy too, but finding the right one can help ;)

[Emilia A]

So passionate in so few words! I can really identify with these feelings. Lovely poem!

[Chris Micha]

Thanks so much Emilia :)

[s y e]

This is not stupid, it's very sweet and cute. Sometimes all we need is a little bit of love with a dip of sugar and spice and all things nice. :)

[Chris Micha]

Well I'm out of all that :(

[s y e]

Whaaat? I don't believe it! A nice, caring guy like you? That should be illegal. You'll find some lady who will fall head over heels in love with you... Dontcha worry.

[h d e rushin]

i am, usually, divided. I want only the phony, rotten, bullshit parts of me to rust out...All else I
want to wear out, one synapse - nervous-neuron -impulse after another...lol.

great imagery here.
dana

[Chris Micha]

Parts of my mind call rust out lol. Thank you for the awesome review. :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

aw this is nice...mechanical is what our hearts become after so much abuse...nice to get the gears running smoothly again...

I like this kind of sappy...it's metaphoric.

[Chris Micha]

Thanks Jacob! Sometimes we need these ole sappy stripped down ones every now & then. :)