Invisible Words

Sometimes speaking words makes you feel invisible.

 

Invisible Words

 

I'm not sure what to do with these left over words

I was going to permanently entwine into your conscious fabric

Along with the others that had been laid with sincere adoration

That was creating the foundation for your heart.

 

I was going to build you a citadel out of them

That would have stood atop infinity's grounds

But I was building around an unsecured wall

That had already been constructed

with wishful bricks of yesteryear. 

 

Your heart is covered in another's unattached words

That my words attach to and fall off

Leaving scattered loud words of guarantees

Under words whispered in maybes.

 

I guess I'll save these words for a rainy day

When someone's heart is ready to be constructed

With reciprocal words of love & affection

So it may shine with the life it deserves. 

 

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Reviews

[Frontier]

Too often powerful words are often overlooked and or underplayed by those we care/love. This poem possessed a profound simplicity, I especially like
" Your heart is covered in another's unattached words
That my words attach to and fall off", and "I was going to build you a citadel out of them
That would have stood atop infinity's grounds", beautiful.

[Chris Micha]

Thank you so much, Frontier :)

[~]

Words spoken are invisible until they are seen with the heart, but first the heart must be open for them to be received. I have always found that actions speak louder and open the heart wide when they are made with sincerity. Well written poem, I felt the depth of sadness lingering on each line.

[Chris Micha]

Thank you so much. I really appreciative :)

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

Wow this was amazing and it had an air of ... ugh I can't put my finger on it lol it blew me away and stole the words from my lips as kisses blown lost in the wind of longing

This go's right into my faves

[Chris Micha]

Thank you doll, I am truly honored! :)

[Bluefire]

This is beautiful and uniquely played out.
I like the unusual word choice, it was like running through a maze of familiarity yet it was so very unfamiliar.
Well done! ^^

[Chris Micha]

Thank you so much, Bluefire for stopping by to review. I am so appreciative! :)

[Bluefire]

You're welcome. ^^

[Sandra]

Beautiful creativity Christian. You did an axcellent job. Thank you to share this one.

[Chris Micha]

Sandra, I am so honored by you! Thank you. :)

[Natalie Dieudonne]

Mr. Romantic Poet you have made me cry sad tears with this piece. But I do appreciate it because its real and relatable.
Your heart is covered in another's unattached words
That my words attach to and fall off
Leaving scattered loud words of guarantees
Under words whispered in maybes.

Wow, these words pulled at my heart. The raw emotion in them is overwhelming.
I really like this piece even though it leaves me feeling sad.

[Chris Micha]

Awe Natalie, you are just the sweetest friend and I am so glad to have you. Thank you so much sweetheart!

[Natalie Dieudonne]

You're welcome sweetie :)

[Brook]

Wonderful write Christian, as always.

[Chris Micha]

Thank you my dear, Brook. Always a pleasure!

[Aethereal]

Ah, this is a good use of the “You should not build on shifting sands metaphor.” Every relationship needs a good foundation if it is to thrive. Ephemeral are Castles built of sand near oncoming Waves of Dissolution.

[Chris Micha]

Thank you my wonderful dear friend. You are so amazing with your words. :)

[Ashley Griffiths]

I think that there are many people that will be able to relate to this. We often waste our time and energy on things that seem a good idea at the time.

[Chris Micha]

Ashley, you are so right and I thank you for taking the time to review! :)

[MagicAl]

Lovely though heartbreaking read Christian... the words have clearly come from deep within. Lovely write, :)

[Chris Micha]

Thank you, Magic. Heartbreak is just apart of life, but it will heal. :)