Invisible Words

Sometimes speaking words makes you feel invisible.

 

Invisible Words

 

I'm not sure what to do with these left over words

I was going to permanently entwine into your conscious fabric

Along with the others that had been laid with sincere adoration

That was creating the foundation for your heart.

 

I was going to build you a citadel out of them

That would have stood atop infinity's grounds

But I was building around an unsecured wall

That had already been constructed

with wishful bricks of yesteryear. 

 

Your heart is covered in another's unattached words

That my words attach to and fall off

Leaving scattered loud words of guarantees

Under words whispered in maybes.

 

I guess I'll save these words for a rainy day

When someone's heart is ready to be constructed

With reciprocal words of love & affection

So it may shine with the life it deserves. 

 

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Reviews

[Frontier]

Too often powerful words are often overlooked and or underplayed by those we care/love. This poem possessed a profound simplicity, I especially like
" Your heart is covered in another's unattached words
That my words attach to and fall off", and "I was going to build you a citadel out of them
That would have stood atop infinity's grounds", beautiful.

[Chris Micha]

Thank you so much, Frontier :)

[Purbleazaleya]

Very powerful and rooted in reality. More often that not we do things too fast, it's not the right time. All we have to do is wait and see when is the best time where we really can make an impact, and only then we push

[Chris Micha]

Thank you so much. I am so honored by your words and so appreciative. :)

[Madalyn Beck]

This is a beautiful poem. Sometimes, it doesn't matter what we say or do. When one person is negligent and doesn't see what is standing right in front of them, it can break the other wanting to give them everything.

I loved these lines the most.
"I guess I'll save these words for a rainy day
When someone's heart is ready to be constructed"

We should all wait for someone who is deserving of our words and heart. Beautifully crafted. xo :)

[Chris Micha]

Thank you my dear, Madalyn. You are so wonderful and your words mean so much to me! :)

[just Penny]

First thing that hit me was the format and those large bold words for the title - I like that. Sounds like someone doesn't realise the depth of feelings on offer and has made a choice that doesn't include them. The analogy of building or relying on unstable ground works well in this scenario. I guess in time they may eat those words and re-evaluate their choices, but it may come all too late. Well written, as always, from your talented fingers :) Penny

[Chris Micha]

Penny, I am truly honored my dear. I'm really glad you were able to grasp where I was going with you, but you always do! I hope you are having a great day. :)

[Girl With A Pen]

"I guess I'll save these words for a rainy day
When someone's heart is ready to be constructed"

Your word play is astounding! I feel in love with the emotion in this poem!

[Chris Micha]

Angela, thank you so much for your wonderful review! :)

[Matching Socks]

It's a beautiful poem and your words are not wasted.

"Leaving scattered loud words of guarantees
Under words whispered in maybes."

I like these lines.

[Chris Micha]

Thank you so much, Ance. I am honored! :)

[sona]

"I guess I'll save these words for a rainy day
When someone's heart is ready to be constructed"
Love this line ... Saving love for the one who deserves sounds good

[Chris Micha]

Thank you so much, Sona. I really appreciate your words! :)

[Larq]

"I was going to permanently entwine into your conscious fabric
Along with the others that had been laid with sincere adoration
That was creating the foundation for your heart."----
The narrator demonstrates such a deep desire to connect with another human-leaving an imprint on her/his heart. Words here are beautifully constructed.
"Your heart is covered in another's unattached words
That my words attach to and fall off
Leaving scattered loud words of guarantees
Under words whispered in maybes."----
I understand this to mean that in comparison to "another" the narrator is the sincere one but realizes his efforts are futile---I was left wondering if the "someone's heart" at the end is the same person the narrator is trying to reach. Maybe she/he expects that person will return when her/his heart is broken. ???
I was very intrigued by this piece and read it many times to find deeper meaning. Sophisticated poetry.

[Chris Micha]

Thank you so much for your amazing and wonderful review. You are right my dear, I am speaking of the same person at the end as I was at the beginning. I am truly honored you got that! :)

[Elina]

This is wonderful; you've done a beautiful job of portraying unrequited love. I did notice one thing that may need to be fixed (although I tend to hesitate to offer grammatical critiques with poems as sometimes the mistakes are intended)

"I was going to build you a citadel out of them
That would of stood atop infinity's grounds"

In the second line, the "of" should be "have."

[Chris Micha]

Thank you so much, Elina for the wonderful review. You're absolutely right and it does need changing. :)

[Elina]

You are most welcome.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

his words are unattached---i like that..

he doesn't care for you like i do...and right now any words i write for you would be invisible..

but the day you see through his, and realize his shallowness and lack of real love...perhaps you will read me once again...and this time the words, might sink in...

[Chris Micha]

Jacob, thank you sir, for being an amazing poet and for the support you've shown. I am honored that you take the time to read and understand my words. :)