Initiation

Young fledglings linger

Curiosity strikes a jolt

What test is there to find one’s self

In the depth of this darkened room?

 

Why must we reflect?

What is there left to ponder?

Snatched at birth, stolen self worth

Past this unlit gloom

 

No thought of us escaping

We know no other life

Trained to kill, unknowing still

Heed no other vice

 

Control your feelings, Master said

Pay the heart no regard

The power stands in the palm of your hand

Numb yourself and suffice

 

No glimmer of hope stands

We stop for no man

We find ourselves in darkness

Our thoughts are in unison

 

No hope…

Reviews

[compositionc]

Very...dark and somewhat disturbing. You have one piece about keeping hope and now you saw NO HOPE.

[nothingnothingforgetfor..]

Dark and touching. I can see a shadow smirking ..great piece

[☯]

A very vivid and descriptive write about hope and loss. I can feel the emotions and strength flowing from this poem and the way you faded everything away.
"The power stands in the palm of your hand
Numb yourself and suffice"
A poignant and beautiful write :)

[Cherrie Palmer]

very smooth and poignant

[Veronica Chandler]

Beautiful write and I see more in these words than what is obvious. Very powerful and moving piece.

[StarSandwich]

I agree with HopelesslyDevoted. xD
Truly Amazing.

[Dahlia Phoenix]

When there is no hope, there is no life. Period. Its the end but the way you wrote this brings in a feeling of much more than that, like an empty hole waiting to be filled.

[Helpless]

No hope....
wow.... how many times do we end our days feeling this way.
wonderful poem, really! amazing wording!

[joshua deathdealer]

I like the imagery in this poem. Great write.

[Sunni Davis]

I get such a sad feeling while reading this. Its very awell written poem.