Silhouettes

Summer is my favorite season

I was born in the hazy heat

In the middle of a black and white city

that never goes to sleep

 

I hear a black crow at my window

her song, it frightens me

hard sandels, and coin medallions

a green dress, and Greek keys

 

The things we wanted they came too fast

and now we're stuck dwelling on the past

 

It would have been a boy, if he was real

and I would have named him Simon or James

I would have cried cause he was yours

He would have had a precious face

 

You have Rubies, Turquiose, and Sapphires,

I just have the moon, and a few pearls

You can light yourself on fire if you want to

and I'll smile at the world

 

So take my hand

and say something simple

you said it plenty when I didn't ask

Go on. Say that you love me

I didn't expect much,

I'm okay with that.

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Wolfwind]

This piece is a wealth of diversity at the same moment, solidly deep and emotional. Each stanza could stand alone, conjuring it's own set of images and feelings. Yet when flowing together they fit together and pulsate with a pondering sadness, at the same time a breeze of hope.
Overall I would have to say that I saw this piece as being about young love, bad choices made to soon, a mellow sort of regret at the same time blanketed by wisdom and the need to keep walking forward.

Beautiful Ink!
Aaron

[Brandon]

I've read it over and over and each time there is something new about it to discover and become fascinated with. I think the title is perfect.

[nostal]

spectacular.

[Vinod Kumar U K]

Very nice all ingredients are essential for love.......

[Jeremy Baker]

The ending is vivid and hard hitting, and gives the overall poem a real edge to it. The symbolism and imagery are first rate - great writing here!

[Orlando Murcia]

Nicely done...


Orlando M

[Stonewall]

The last stanza here speaks to me. I must admit, I get a little lost between the start and the end, and it reminds me a little bit of some of my poems in the way they are more about a state of mind, than a single coherent idea. Still, I can't help but like it.

[Becky C Strukamp]

Theres so many messages in this poem. Some moving on and forward, and coming to terms. Good writing!!

[Kelsie Stoner]

This is great. Really putting everything out in the open, not hiding anymore behind a smile. I love it.