8:16

Life is anything but stable.

         One day you're at the top then you're struggling in a new different way. It's just up to our character and soul to make some type consistency in this dirt, so consistent that when any challenge that passes through us either expected , unexpected, side ways, Fridays, that it won't matter , we'll get through it.

                         The only body we have to live in is ourselves. 

                                       

                                      Your body is a building. You're the super, you make space for who ever you want in your life. If they pay their rent on a reasonable time, they get closer to you and you trust them. There will always be problems in your building. Either is door problems, sink problems, cable problems , they will always come. 

                                            

                                           Having a perfect building in our lives is impossible 

                                                                                                    Is up to us, 

                                                                                                         to handle the

                                                                                                               problems 

                                                                                                     or let 'em handle us

Reviews

[Noehm Strawhair]

I really liked how you compared a building with a person's own body, I hadn't even heard of a comparison like that and I think it is really creative and accurate. By reading your work I have really started to imagine how my building looks like, and how the people inside it behave. I think maybe I need a remodeling.
I really enjoyed it, but I just wanted to say that I would really liked it if you would make an example of a description of a room and it's colors to the situation in a person's life. That would be so awesome!!! Thanks a lot c:

[CRZ]

Thank you maggie :) & you gave me a great idea, we'll let time decide what I do.

[Noehm Strawhair]

and I'll be eager to read it!! :D

[Angelphires]

lol. This makes me think of a lot of things. I may not be perfect, but this is the only life I have so I must make the most of it. Interesting comparison with bodies being like buildings.

[MandaBear]

Very interesting! I liked how you compared the body with a building that is quite clever! Great job!

[Jon Roggie]

Nice! Well said. Once again, being told I need to use at least 25 characters. First three words were my thoughts. Anyway, keep writing. I will try to stop in when time permits.

[dw817]

Need to comment, Jon, this is an unusual error I have come across some times now in the past few days. Sometimes the error message also appears if I write a whole bunch, well past 25-characters.

I don't know a way around it, I checked the forums for information but couldn't come up with anything.

What I do now is try a different browser like Opera and copy-paste the same message to comment. Usually that gets it. I hope it's just a temporary error that WC is aware of and trying to correct !

[redflutterby]

WC has changed some things. You now have to enter a review or comment of at least 25 characters. ;-)

[dw817]

I never have problems writing more than 25-characters in a reply, AMSargent. Never ever - not once not ever and even with the ... *SMACK* Okay, sorry ... :)

[redflutterby]

You're so funny... Watch out or they will limit how many you can use. ;-)

[Jon Roggie]

I am merely constrained by time and the pain in my hands. So if I want to say i like what I read in a few words, and am denied, it ticks me off. Excuse the venting please. Back to why I first stopped by. Liked the write!

[Anne Bathory]

Not what I expected but I like it, it's definitely an nontraditional format for a poem but I think it goes quite nicely with the message you're going for. I'd put a comma after impossible and a period at the end of your stanza though, it tends to make the voice in the reader's head a bit stronger and more fluid when reading it.

[dw817]

You can be a skyscraper if you want. As for me I choose to be a stained-glass window. *Grin*

But yes, I fully agree with the last part. I was writing a tutorial a few months back in Xanga for new students starting their first day of school - on how to handle bullies there, I said you need to learn how to handle the situations they put you in, or they'll just learn new ways of how to handle you.

[Loveless]

I love it!! it's very well written & true! VERY well done!!

~Kali

[Aethereal]

I think that you presented a excellent metaphor for the box within box nature of reality. Every cell in our body is also a building that has its problems. A molecule is a building. The Earth is one, and so is our Universe. What's important is how each box (building) relates to those boxes both composing it, and outside of it. Sometimes a box is cannibalized by other boxes for building blocks. We're the logic our structure as it changes from moment to moment. I enjoyed how your free verse flowed along with a structure of its own.