Thought

My destination is ahead of me.

So everyone I encounter,

Consider them a frienenemie.

Until proven otherwise.

Because others want to see you

make it to see your downfall

televised. 

Reviews

[Mike Emil]

one of the reasons I hate reality tv shows
damnable things
ARRGH!!!

[Kianna]

Dear CRZ Jason CRZ,

I think you should either remove all the periods or revise the punctuation in this poem because the periods make it hard to flow. Also the second stanza is a little confusing. I think it could use some revising. Although, I do understand what you are saying, the execution of the piece was just awkward. Never mind, I guess it is fine how it is.

I do not agree with the idea of this poem either. I just believe in giving every one the benefit of a doubt. You only get one shot with me, and it's usually a long one. I guess though I can agree you must be cautious of those around you- those who want to see you make it and those who want to see you fall.

Interesting read. Thanks for sharing!

Sincerely JazzSoulKeke,

God bless

[Barbara Walker]

Your intent comes through well. The syntax is a bit of a problem in the second stanza.
"Until proven otherwise
because others
want to see you fail
and your downfall televised."

Or something along those lines. As written, it is a little confusing. With a little editing, it would be a great poem.

[Leandro Mendez]

True, true, trust is a cool test to pass, not everybody is worth the time. cool and simple.

[Rebecca Buller]

Only seven lines, yet they say so much. Very well done:)

[Lexi Richard]

Such a short, seemingly simple poem, but leaves a great impression. Beautifully written.

[BL]

Frenenimies seeing your downfall televised, apt words chosen and not paranoid at all

[DCT ponderings]

The world of frenemies where everyone seems ready to caught you on candid camera and display it to the world. Well done.

[TL Boehm]

frenemies abound and true friends are a scarce commodity.
Well penned.

[Rob Funk]

Very nice bro, I understand what its like when others cannot wait to see life snatched away from us.