Everything seemed to be clear, like the truth was reveal, but it wasn't true, you were hiding, under your mask, to show everyone, how friendly you were.
Will anyone, trust you? After lying to me, hurting me, breaking my heart, will any girl, still believe, you are the man, of their dreams?
Will anyone, stilll believes, who you try, to pretend, to be?
Get your mask off, I want to see, the real you, cruel and mad, it is the true you.
First off this is a very powerful message. Many people hide behind masks. And are not who you think they are and in the end they always tend to get seen through. Though that's after all the hate they cause with their lies. This is excellently written and it grabbed attention from the start to the end. I did however notice a couple of mistakes. 'Reveal' seems awkward in the second line shouldn't it be revealed? And 'still' in the last but one stanza as got too many l's. Other than that this is written really well and its thought provoking.
I think this is a wonderfully sad poem. I really think you describe this really well. Masks hide the real person underneath it. Like sometimes people mask what they are truly feeling because they want people to like them. You don't want to come out as fake. You want to be able to reveal yourself to the people around you, but sometimes we come out with a mask...because we don't want to reveal the true person that's inside us. That's what I got from this poem anyway. Great job. Thanks for sharing. :D
nice!! you're growing as a poet! each new thing of yours I read is stronger than the last!! you raise a good point in this one - the fickle and 2 sided nature of people! the mask and the true person, problem is knowing which one is which!! I liked it!! 100
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