Eclipse Of Our Life

Human suffering - can we change things?

In a land that suffers from starvation

where white bones show laying in dry orange dust

vulnerable parched mouths, have scars of atrocities

where disease shrivels the carcass and ones radical opinions need no rendition

it only depicts grim and relentless human suffering

lets crush hope of all description!

We sit and watch in our vulgar prism

while in our garage we stuff our personal possessions

that are of no use to us anymore

seeped in our distorted forms of tradition

and inverted superficial western culture

our stellar image must portray propagandist materialistic wealth and happiness!

but reality depicts we are oceans away from any authenticity

just a slow strangulation in seaweed and plastic containers!

Reviews

[Robert Haigh]

There is much wrong in this unequal world. Governments and big corporations must shoulder most of the blame, but we can all try to do our bit to help. Trouble is, there are so many greedy and uncaring people (and companies) on this planet of ours. Will there ever be real change? Looking at the famine and hardship in Africa alone, it is as if Band Aid (1984 music charity supergroup that raised millions of pounds/dollars) never even happened! Not just sad, but tragic!

[Einstein Noodle]

such a complex world filled with such an array of people and situations ...i hear the anthems of reaching out to help one another and the false security of "goods" ... i am reminded of the Bible reading "The poor you will always have with you, but you will not always have me." Matthew 26:11
reading feels like i am being preached at rather than put in the experience ... more a rant if you will ... although that may be your intent and it is strong and clear ... perhaps using a person not your self to show us the skin of experiencing being poor or being rich and callous ... just a couple ideas that came to me while reading ... i like the free form a lot ... your poem has deep meaningful truths and lessons to take away with me this morning ... i honestly struggle with what and how much to give .. and to whom .. all the time .. for the masses in the middle class when money has to fix the car or our childrens health ..giving to others of necessity has to slip a bit .. so i feel guilty :{ ah well .. we do our best eh!? great read...obviously you really engaged me ;)
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[Phill Oz O'fee]

Suffering may be felt individually but its alleviation is social and requires not only social cooperation but social institutions that work together effectively. Thank you for sharing your own thoughts and feelings – the world has a long way to go to tackle this issue …. bless :-)

[Hebe]

Thank you Phill, yes your right we do need global organization but we also need to fly under one flag the human race flag, then we will be effective....a long way to go:) appreciate your view and review.

[andrew mitchell]

For my weak eyes your italics were hard to read but a bold strong poem in message, well done.

[Hebe]

Hi Andrew.... sorry, I should make it bigger!....but thank you for your review always appreciate it!

[Hebe]

It is better now... made it bigger, now I can read it easier too!

[andrew mitchell]

much better:):)

[Chase Dylan]

This was a very strong write, made even more powerful with the bold presentation... Dark against a backdrop of white... Kind of like my material happiness... Hah... Plastic containers, eh...? Amazingly penned, really...

[Hebe]

Thank you Silente for your comments.... hey even recycling goes a long way ;)

[Paul Bell]

Will it change anytime soon. No.
Will it get worse. Definitely.

[Hebe]

Hi Paul... no it won't change, if we don't change. Thank you for your review, your comment is so true!

[angelina neves]

very profound and powerful. well said... a good use of the words.

[Hebe]

Thank you ...appreciate you stopping by... we are destroying our beautiful planet...

[angelina neves]

and that means destroying ourselves with it..

[Hebe]

Yes unfortunately. ..

[Sami Khalil]

You write marvelously and powerfully. You depict authenticity in many things...:).................

[Hebe]

Thank you so much.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome. ....: :::))))

[Bala Gorthi]

It is a very moving write, Hebe. The ironies and contrasts in extreme are everywhere and we are lost in our display culture. Your write mirrored the fact so well. Thank you for sharing this write, Hebe..

[Hebe]

Hi Bala... appreciate your thoughts, thank you

[Bala Gorthi]

You are welcome, Hebe.

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

Well after reading it, I must say that you are a brilliant writer. The way you molded the poem using the TEN words with meaning behind each lines, it seems really a perfect one.

[Hebe]

Thank you very much Sky...appreciate your words

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

Welcome friend :)