THEY fell

SHE FELL

for an angel with a demon,

for a genius with no brain,

for a boyfriend with no heart and

for a heart that's gone insane.

for a teen who's still a child,

for medicine that brings pain,

for a person she never met and

for a love she won't obtain.

SHE SAW HIM

as a man that was a genius,

as a boy more than a friend,

as a husband who would love, and

as a love without an end.

as a pair of hands to hold her,

as a heart that she could mend,

as a warmth that she could feel, and

as a dead man she'd defend.

SHE LEFT HIM

as a suicidal dead man

who would quickly turn to meth,

as a roadblock in the way, he

was a man that soon knew death.

SHE SAW HIM

for the last time at his funeral,

where she soon began to see.

that the man who she was missing

was in a cage; she held the key.

Reviews

[Riley Justine]

This poem has real meaning for, I feel, many people. Really well done.

[Not here]

hopefully many people can relate. i try to make my poems like that. thanks :)

[Corbin Driver]

It's a very deep poem, and I like it! Great job!

[Not here]

im glad :) i appredciate your reviews corbin very much

[MissLaine]

I love this one! Ahh such love..and true this is, it's very relatable~ I love how you wrote this!

[Not here]

thank thank thank you :) im glad you liked it

[MissLaine]

:) haha, i adored it!

[Not here]

well thanks for that too lol

[MissLaine]

lol :) no problem

[Brittany Bostic]

This was very different than most of your poems but I quite like it. The different form you write your poems, the rhyme scheme and theme of each one is so beautiful. I really enjoy the journey this one brought me through.

[Not here]

thanks brittany :) im really glad youve liked all of these that youve been reading lately

[dan]

david, I don't know why you ask me where I get my ideas; the basis for this write, and the format you used to convey your idea, are outstanding. You started it out as a seemingly bright love story and concluded it with a drug addicted man destined to send that love crashing with his overdose, him in a casket. A very well constructed story line wonderfully expressed. Where do you get YOUR ideas? take care...dan

[Not here]

ummm i get my ideas from my life normally and stuff that's happened to me and stuff that i see. thank you very much dan :) i really appreciate all of your reviews lately. it means alot

[Rajat malik]

It was so touching.....Hats off to you .......I wish i could do more than that........Everything was amazingly told just like they do in movies......

[Not here]

keep your hat on because it looks pretty stylish :) lol. anyways thank you very much. im glad you enjoyed it

[Rajat malik]

You are welcome......always

[Tomoe Tellez]

Oh my gosh! This si so beautiful I could not choose a line. I loved every single line even if ended tragically, but I guess that if a love story doesn't have something tragic in it really wasn't about love. Great job! Very beautiful.

[Not here]

lol thank you very much :) and i agree. im really glad you loved it so much

[Willard Wells]

Had to be there. Nicely done with some thoughts in your head that did not make paper. The last two lines made me as What??

[Not here]

yeah im not sure where this came from. just a random poem i thought of

[Willard Wells]

Well that's where most of my work comes from so welcome. Oh wait you've been here before, now I remember, it's coming back to me.

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmi..]

To quote eve
"Love is blind, and it will take over your mind
What you think is love, is truly not
You need to elevate and find"
- Love is Blind

I really appreciate your thought process of this. I love the way it takes us on a ride though the beginning, middle and end of this relationship. Solid word choice and great phasing. The one thing I enjoyed the most was the flawless smooth transition in to and out of the rhymes, they were ceaseless and seems very organic and not forced. GREAT JOB

[Not here]

thank you very much crystal :) im glad you liked this

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

A poem with a twist on the end. Well done, Dante. :) Rudi

[Not here]

thank you very much rudi :)