Time Of Death

Life’s moments are grains of sand

In the hourglass of the human spirit,

If you allow those grains

To slip through your fingers

They become the dirt

You will be buried beneath.

If you do not cry

Your soul will dry up,

To deny love

In fear of heartache

Is a self-made heart attack,

When you choose

Not to laugh

At the little things

Is like wearing

The Grim Reaper’s face.

My many attempts

To inspire you

Was my way

To revive you,

But your vital signs

Tell me it’s too late…

So with regret

I will call it,

 

“Time of death, the moment you took your first breath.”

 

Reviews

[Rita L. Sev]

We dig our own graves when we wallow in misery... This is a flow of truth, deep and undeniable, Dale. This is a great one!

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Great way of putting it, thank you Rita :)

[TL Boehm]

If you allow those grains
To slip through your fingers
They become the dirt
You will be buried beneath.
ouch
“Time of death, the moment you took your first breath.”
and ouch again. I nice poetic slap in the face - WAKE UP. Well penned.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thanks Tammy… I thought it was more effective then a poetic handshake, LOL

[Frieda P]

Inspiration doesn't always revive the soul when its cried a million tears in that same ocean's depths...just saying. Good stuff...bury me. :)

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Don't make me give your muse CPR. Thanks Moonbeam.

[A. Amos]

Wonderful loved it...what a great writing.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Well thank you so much.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i think my soul dried up long ago...and i found myself buried in a cold mausoleum entombed by own fear of loving again...

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Mine has turned into a raisin… one that was dropped on the floor and kicked under the stove.

[kublakhan27]

If you do not cry
Your soul will dry up...

Awesome, you nailed it...great job :)

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Why thank you very much.

[kublakhan27]

My pleasure.

[Patricia]

Every single line is perfect! Absolutely perfect!

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Well not sure bout perfect but thank you sweetie.

[Mark]

You have some very strong lines in this RnR, I love how you wrote of the souls necessities reminding us that to deny, is to starve, and also allowing us to reflect on who we call friends (those whom wish and take the time to inspire)

I love this one RnR, created with thoughtful intent, beautiful

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Why thanks so much, glad you liked it.

[Jennie Baron]

Brilliant! A great statement on living to the fullest.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Why thai you Jennie, always appreciate your feedback.