A Message To The Sea

A collaboration with Kara Emily Krantz... the female perspectives are in blue.

To the Sea:

 

I’m sending out a plea for help

I'm sending out a prayer of safety

Not for me, but the one I lost.

Not for me, but the one I let slip away.

Separated now by this cold, cold war.

Separated now by cold, distant shores.

 

My love is frozen in time.

And now I can't melt the distance between us

I’m stranded in a foreign land

He's in unknown places, without the comfort of my hand.

 

Alone, I remain along the isolated shoreline of my heart.

I can only stand here and place my feet along the water's edge

If only I knew she were there, somewhere

And pray he feels me somewhere, here…

Awaiting my arms to pull her into forever

For all I want is to feel forever in his embrace.

 

Then I’d have the strength to find a way home

Bring him home to me.

For without my soul’s companion

For without him

I have no will to return.

It's too hard a lesson to learn.

 

I should have said goodbye.

 

Author's Note

I want to thank Kara for agreeing to do this collaboration with me, she is one of the sweetest people and most talented writers I know... I enjoyed working on this with her, it was fun.

Reviews

[Dani California]

Fabulous you two! You worked very well together... :)

You know, this touches me personally with my son in law deployed to Iraq and my daughter and grandkids suffering over his absence daily and her being in a constant state of worry. She jumps everytime the doorbell rings.... doesn't like to answer the phone... it's just horrible. And this is only one family... there are thousands. This has to end.

You have captured the emotion and thought very well. BRAVO!!

[Dezaraye]

This is a breathtaking piece. The two of you should definitely be proud of it! I love the flow to it and the different voices in the lines. The sea is so powerful and so soothing at the same time. It's magic always amazes me.

[Silent Kim aka mizmetap..]

This is a very good piece, It was like a duet in song. You worked so well together and created a great piece. I truely loved it.

Kim

[Winter McPherson]

So cool you two! I loved it! I could hear the male and female voices and their different perspectives. Bravo and two thumbs up!

[Windy]

Interesting way to write with both sides, him and her. I liked it. Something different, unique. Though a sad subject that is affecting so many. We should always say goodbye... Good job to you both. Smiles

[Jessi]

nice work i love the way it is written it made it easy to read

[Kara Emily Krantz]

wow, people love it!! i'm so glad it's been received so well. thanks for asking me to join you - this was my first collaboration ever, and it helped stretch me as a writer, so thank you :) it's nice to get out of our comfort zone every now and then, and in this case, create something new and lovely :)

[Jenny Davis]

Wish I had seen this sooner! This is sooo lovely and the end really makes ya think. I think you two complimented each other's talents wonderfully here...kudos! :)

[Wildfleour]

Absolutely wonderful! Bravo to you and Kara!

[Gandré]

Hey there Dale, this is such a perfect piece. It touched me, such a truth and personal state about man, I found a lot of sadness not just the obligatory lust, this was a charming poem, and spot on precisely written longing, wonderful, your imaginery. Not to talk about the arrangement of of colors and voices. give me more. your best poem ever. favorit.

[Brette Medb]

A perfect blend of the two of you, you work well together. I liked towards the end how they seemed to echo each other's silent pleas. Truly great write with a lot of nice imagery and allusions.


Brette