I Thou Sacrifice

                                            

Under this relentless red sky

I shall endure

To bring color to your barren soul.

For there is no greater deed

Then to know that my parchment

Means new life

To your thirsty emotions.

You can drain me of my strength

Yet I shall never become your weakness.

Wrap my stem around your heart,

I promise that my thorns

Shall only make you bleed

What thy needs…

The sins of yesterday,

The mistakes of tomorrow.

For to be the rose

That keeps thy desires from wilting

I thou sacrifice.

 

 

Reviews

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

Damn Dale, you are getting better and better. i love this poem, absolutely love it. so sincere, so romantic and passionate, and like a bryan adams song, "everything i do i do it for you." The metaphors in this piece are off the chain, and they all work well together, and end with the analogy of a rose, and instead of a cliche of talking about a woman being the rose, YOU are the rose. nice touch. thanks for sharing.
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[Sorry Infamous]

And I am floored...
Potent, potent imagery. I adored this. Every single word.

[Voice]

WOW now those are some powerful words just brilliant. The flow and format work great with each other and I just love the picture you chose for this piece it is magnificent!!!

Voice

[Silent Kim aka mizmetap..]

Well damn, cowboy, you sure changed the direction your horse is galloping in. Very poetic, sincere and full of passion, not a hint of lust in the least. Very nice work.

[MIA ST. PAUL]

Theres no greater love then to sacrifice ourselves for another. You are a romantic underneath all that bad boy persona. I love this piece Dale. Thanks for sharing.

:) Mia..

[LisetteCanWrite!]

Supreme.. to sacrifice yourself and be that rose that does embrace that poor barren soul.. keep it healthy and feeling all the elements of life perhaps.. romantic, loving and full of intensity pouring from your heart in this one.. under a relentless red sky.. what a metaphor.. like the blood that flows through humanity and hearts.. and allows us to live.. life itself is found in this writing.. keeping the desires from wilting.. what a passionate and sincerely touching writing.. keep it up!!! Love this one.. =)

[Sheila Kline]

Oh so very elegant and touching, and certainly romantic!! Ok....I am going to swoon even it is out of style....pick me up off the floor! I love this.....so passionate, and rocks my heart!
Great poem Dale!!

[Lizanne]

How do you do such magnificent work? I pay homage to you. This will surely touch many a heart.
If swooning were not out of style, you would have the ladies dropping at your feet with this one.

[Anastasia Starlena]

Very beautiful piece pulled from the depths of ones soul. Excellent.

[Babbette Francis]

Whoooh...wow, This is pure beauty, Dale. Pure Beauty!!!
Its in my faves!!!