War

War…
People joke about it
Yeah.
It's funny
When it's not you fighting for your life
They say it's all worth fighting for in the end…
You'll win the honor, the respect...
But it's not…
It never is…
Once you're in
You'll never get out,
Never.

I've seen so much so far
The guns, the bombs.
And I'm young
But I also wanted this…
I was promised this

Here in the trenches
It's terrible
There are things I can't un see
Faces, the gushing blood. 
There are things I can't undo
The murders, the crying, and even the silent praying
I can't get out 
I thought I would never get out…

There are things I can't not hear
The horrible screaming 
I still can't believe it
I'm traumatized
For the rest of my life

Now that it's over
I don't know how to survive
Now that it's over
I'm afraid of holes
Now that’s over
I praying for this to end
Now that it's over
I'm always in fear

Waiting… and waiting
I can't believe I'm still alive…
Waiting and waiting
For it all to end.

Reviews

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wow-this is an intense-strong poem-
a very poignant write-
you really expressed the mood vividly-
and this reads so smoothly...

this is a magnificent piece of poetry!!!

...this is wonderful...

"Now that it's over
I don't know how to survive
Now that it's over
I'm afraid of holes
Now that’s over
I praying for this to end
Now that it's over
I'm always in fear

Waiting… and waiting
I can't believe I'm still alive…
Waiting and waiting
For it all to end. "

james:-)

[Joshua Donahue]

a very honest and emotional poem that exposes the truth behind war. i hate that word and everything it stands for: greed, hatred, violence, blood, hurt, pain, and everything else that is causing this world to slowly drain form what it once was.

[James Maines]

that was fantastic... i could feel the fear. i know a lot of people who are like this and i feel you expressed the meanings of what they went through really well.

[DamienHino]

very graphic I like the imagery and the message

[Shante Payne]

This actually makes me think that you are a real soilder. This is great, I love how you say there are things that you cant un see or un hear and thinking that you'll never get out and when you finally do you are still ruled by war. That's amazing how you grasp the concept. Great Write once again.

[Yuki]

Reading it it's very easy to imagine some who just came from the from the front or who was there and still has all the horrible memories. I love your work. The way you describe all these horrors is really dramatic and real. I think everyone knows the basic common knowledge that war is something bad but very few people can define why exactly it is bad. You did very well!!!

[Taylor H.]

this is so true. I loved it. Great heart felt poem!

[Love Is Dead]

wow! its like if you knew someone that was in war and told you all about it or you just read it somewhere.I would hate to be in war to risk my own life just to fight for land or something else.I would be really scared seeing other people lose there lives and watching them...and maybe you being killed? But it would be a pleasure if your still a live and survive it.If its another relative i would give them the best luck of all and hope that he would be alright and not get injured.
Favorite Line:
"I don't know how to survive
Now that it's over
I'm afraid of holes
Now that’s over
I praying for this to end
Now that it's over
I'm always in fear

Waiting… and waiting
I can't believe I'm still alive…
Waiting and waiting
For it all to end. "