Nightmare

 Light flooding in but dulled by this dark 

A muffled glow vainly fighting for life

 But this shadowy blackness overpowers those attempts 

Laughing as it struggles; mocking its strife 

It's clammy; it's marshy; the light's dying down

Its gasps for breath -they slow down fast 

Though the rope will pull only tighter still 

Honestly, how long can this little light last

 

Author's Note

ha it's totally sucky, again, bored in math class <333

Reviews

[LivingDeath]

I like this alot bhavana, kinda depressing in its own way in my point of view, but that could just be me relating it to my life. But what im trying to say is i love how this light keeps trying to get over the darkness but cant succeed. See for me i can relate that to points in my life where i keep trying to be happy again but theres just so much stuff going on that its hard to and i dont know how long i can withstand it. So this is totally not "sucky" as a matter of fact i greatly enjoy this poem. Amazing write :)

[Liverpoolfan]

You wrote this in maths? How long did that take?
It's is not "sucky". That's an insult to loads of inspiring poets. The way you wrote that with such ease, is beyond me. This is another good poem.

[Dillon Cotter]

it only takes seconds to write a good line, minutes to write a good poem, this is good and short with a great flow and quality.

-Will

[Domo]

Sometimes you put to much doubt into your notes.
It's good, it has a tight flow, is short, but as they say sweet, and reflects on such thoughts and dreams.
~D♥m♥~

[Deepshikha]

Meza likey. [:

You're doing what I used to do in eight grade. XD

[Skelasoldier]

Very good poem, i like how it flows, keep up the good work :D