Foolish Pen

Foolish Pen

 

 

ink spots on the divide

between me and you---

blue---

 

the writings of what was

letters smeared and absorbed

the tears of a poet---

 

who never really

knew what to say

before the ink dried

    on his heart.

 

 

erin-cilberto

6/16/17

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

Bittersweet. A love lost because the poet used the wrong words or could not find the right ones. "before the ink dried on his heart.".....what a fantastic line! Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Lydi

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

BEAUTIFUL! While I love your writing in general, this one is superb. I love the romanticism, the sadness, and the beauty in the tears. Just love!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Linda.
j.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Omg love this I'll keep as a fav

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you are too kind, Julie
thank you

[AprilRN1210]

isn't it funny how we live and breathe our words.. It's one way we know how to express, yet when we need them, sometimes we are the worst at communicating.. hindsight and reflection are needed in the trenches not once the battle is over.. sometimes fate and karma are cruel cousins that keep us in business. this one tugs with a sweet vulnerability. your thought provoking pieces hook me in with their cleverness and possibilities, but these heartfelt ones really get me.I really enjoyed this one Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, April.
j.

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Poignant, memories of love on the written page-" the tears of a poet---"smearing ink with sadness. Feelings of inadequacy, regret "..who never really knew what to say before the ink dried..on his heart."-brilliant line. Brilliant poet.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Annette.
j.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

The theme of the poets loves and loves lost continue in a succinct, tightly constructed and poignant metaphor.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, John...appreciate your kind review...
j.