Audience

Audience

A Poem by jacob erin-cilberto

Audience


sunshine submarines
down under
moonshine mermaids
drunken slumber

ocean beds of starfish enterprise
we rocket under waves
under cover
earning hangover Sundays

at blue current churches
sermons from passing Angel fish
winging their way to heaven

oh the kisses sweet
the soft touches 
of the minnows shimmering
in the light

we stroll beneath the surface of love
and bask in the naked eddies 
being pulled further down into the abyss

of passion as
sunshine submarines
pass above us
and the moonshine mermaids

curl their long tails
into a smile
of approval

as we find God in the deep.


erin-cilberto
8/27/19

© 2019 jacob erin-cilberto


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This reads like a conflict between being spiritual or believing in fairy tales or legends as are the mermaids. Both are an entities where one can only scratch the surface for there is nothing tangible in both.

Posted 1 Year Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Year Ago

true we can only scratch the surface of those...i like where you took this...thank you, andrew.
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Missed this one somehow . . . glad I found it!
T

Posted 1 Year Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Year Ago

thank you, T.
j.
I M probably way off, but drowning our sorrows and seeing the world from the bottom of a glass/ bottle is the overall feel I get from this. (as soon as I saw the word abyss, I made a "mm-hmm sound involuntarily.)
Those damn mermaids get us every time.
" we stroll" verse is the one for me that resonates with me. I can picture the belated reaction on my face as I descend, like a frog realising he's being slowly boiled alive. That look is my default setting these days 😀
It's only when we fall so deep that we see that we are just a minnow too.


Posted 1 Year Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Year Ago

very insightful review..i like this take..thank you, Lorry,
j.
I loved the way the language crashed and merged flowing like ocean waves, sublime imagery and poetry

Posted 1 Year Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Year Ago

thank you for your kind words, gram,
j.
I love the sealife dance between sensual & spiritual here. Your imagery is bobbing my heart along with a much-favored ocean scenario, popping with deeper meanings scattered about! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 1 Year Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Year Ago

thank you, Margie...
appreciate your kindness...feeling a bit like now i am in one of those p.. read more
Sounds like quite a romantic interlude hot enough to melt icebergs.

Posted 1 Year Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Year Ago

thank you, Dale,
j.
“God in the deep” and perhaps something less in the shallows? Intended or not, I read sarcasm (mostly well-deserved) for church-Sunday Christians and others who skim the surface of life. Another thought-provoker, J.

Posted 1 Year Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Year Ago

thank you for your kind and insightful review, R.E.
j.
kentuck14

1 Year Ago

Both God and life are much deeper than most care to dive. You are so right R.E.
T
Lovely as usual, truly romantic.

Posted 1 Year Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Year Ago

thank you, MOON,
j.
inspire can come from most anything yet sometimes it comes out screaming hey look it!!! i like the whimsy juxtaposed with the solidity in the lines of your audience

Posted 1 Year Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Year Ago

thank you for your kind review, bunny,
j.

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jacob erin-cilberto
jacob erin-cilberto

Carbondale, IL



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Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at two community colleges and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. Friending works two ways. If we have had .. more..

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