battle cry

battle cry

an arsenal of words

a barrage of love poems

all the syllabic ammunition at my disposal

a hand grenade heart

exploding in your direction

yet,

you didn't hear a thing

you didn't feel a thing

my war was over before it started

my retreat

an anomaly

hiding in the brush

of blush.

erin-cilberto

9/13/19 

Reviews

[nazia]

Love and war... What a thoughtful comparison. both burn us away if not taken care of....
Insightful

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, nazia,
j.

[Relic]

Your metaphors are always spot on with the subject which to me, make them flow so well. Great poem, J.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Tim,
j.

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

A little girl squeezes her stuffed bunny because she loves him so much, and she squeezes him to death. We have to hold on softly so as not to suffocate. If the other doesn't feel the same, they simply never will. It's best to let them go, to retreat into the harbor of the heart.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful comment, Linda Marie,
j.

[Edie Blue Starfish]

A crush left crushed? Words are wonderful but actions speak louder and more likely to be heard.
It feels a heart poured out but no one drank the love. Maybe they didn't know it was offered or it wasn't the right flavour? I do like the poem and how it makes me wonder.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words and i like your interpretation, Edie.
thanks for the visit.
read morethank you for your kind words and i like your interpretation, Edie.
thanks for the visit.
j.

[Chris Shaw]

Oh my you wear your tender heart on your sleeve here Jacob. That hand grenade my friend was a killer. I took the blast, she didn't feel a thing. War is ugly and so is love when it goes wrong. Brilliant writing.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Chris.
j.

[JR]

I love it, love can have such a huge impact on us emotionally, and we fight that war ourselves most of the time. "a hand grenade heart / exploding in your direction" that is a great image and definitely grabs your reader. This poem was so universal it was easy to get drawn in, nice work.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words JR,
j.

[Digvijay Singh]

How odd this is that what love can do to one and at the same time other can't even sense it. "My hand grenade heart exploding in your heart and you didn't hear a thing" so beautiful and so true.
Well written

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Digvijay,
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

I did like the below lines.
"my war was over before it started
my retreat
an anomaly"
I do understand the above lines. Sometimes, we cannot win. Thank you Jacob for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Coyote,
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Jacob.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Love this short surrender speech as the protagonist realises they were chasing rainbows with this woman.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, John,
j.