Baby Steps

Baby Steps

 

 

focus forward,

rewinding is wearing out the tape

it's time for a new sun

to escape the massive cloud

hinting insane rain pain of the vain

 

soul rising below humanity

replaying outcomes

rejecting the sound of anonymous 

voices

the spoken word

 

spoken,

in the most declarative sentence

ever Punctuated

with the most ear-splitting period

aloud

 

let go

let go

we need you to let go

someone will catch you when you fall

you hope.

 

 

erin-cilberto

11/28/2020

Reviews

[barleygirl]

This poem could apply to so many different ways in which we humans have a hard time letting go & trusting in a new start without an overbearing amount of judgmental attention bogging down those baby steps. But then again, how can we resist visualizing the big baby in diapers crying his foolish heart out at the resolute desk? (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful review, dear friend.
j.

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

You always put the poetry in poetry to me. You give the reader something to delve into. I like how you put "let go" at the end so that the reader would have to. Powerful. tyfs

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Cyprian,
j.

[Dave Brown]

sometimes it is difficult to think we will see 'normal' again

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I know it really is hard to imagine, considering the last many months.
thank you, Dave,
j.

[Patricia]

I loved the sarcastic humor and the frustration was palpable and I share both with you. I have really lost my Christmas spirit this year because of all this but I can still appreciate a good write;)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I have little to no Christmas spirit...I wonder if I will get some back before the day has come and gone.
Thank you, Pat,
j.

[Patricia]

Same here j. for both of us

[Laz K.]

It's almost insulting to just say something blasé like, "good job" to a poem like this.
I'm thinking hard how to express what I feel and think having read these words.
There's just too much, and it'd take hours, days, weeks, or even longer to get to the bottom of it all.

The best I can do is zoom in on certain lines, like "it's time for a new sun"
It reminds me of the Bible that says, "and there is no new thing under the sun."
So, how do we renew ourselves? Is it even possible? It's definitely wished for.

"focus forward,/rewinding is wearing out the tape"
Good piece of advice that I wish I could put into practice.

Like I said, there's not much one can say, except for an idiotic "good job."

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Laz....I appreciate your visit, and you.
j.

[Haley]

This is beautiful and rings through my ears daily. Great job!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Haley,
j.

[Stella Armour]

My advice to myself very often these days Jacob "Let it go, give it to the universe"
It's very cathartic giving yourself a break.....

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I agree, Stella...I agree, let go.
thank you,
j.

[Mimic]

I liked the word usage here
i enjoyed it good job man

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Mimic,
j.

[dessah]

wow, this is beautiful. I really like the last part.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for the kind words, dessah,
j.

[Tepo]

Thoroughly enjoyed the read
Loved the rewinding is wearing out the tape line
I'm of a vintage to remember it fondly
Also
Great ending,, left us with hope but not a confident hope
First I've read from you
Won't be last

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Tepo,
j.