Assault

Assault

 

 

 

bare poems

the poet bears the weight

of naked emotions

 

slogging through verse

conversely straining to unclothe

his heart

 

with bare poems

stripped syllables sullen

they want to stay hidden

 

he won't let them

at least adam and eve had fig leaves

to cover

 

but the pen is a scathing rapist

bare poems conclude

it's just how it is.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

1/28/2021

Reviews

[Saoirse K.]

"but the pen is a scathing rapist"
wow, now that's an image that cuts
this is a really interesting take on the dynamics of writing
the stripping of soul
voluntarily or otherwise
poignant piece, nicely done!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind review, Saoirse,
j.

[andrew mitchell]

Nothing is sacred when the heart or mind is spilt on paper. Really like this one.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Ain't that the truth?
Thank you andrew,
j.

[Dave]

Poets don't hide anything. We bare our souls and we do it in spite of those that would have us bear their discontent with us. Often wearing our hearts on our sleeves we tell of our sorrows, our woes, and joyously, on occasion, the sweeping feelings of unbridled love.

Take care - Dave

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your understanding words, Dave,
j.

[Dave]

Us poets have to put up with a lot of - you know!

Take care - Dave

[Betty Hermelee]

I like how you use bare and bear in this poem; I guess it's the poet's own fault if he has nothing to say; which may mean that he doesn't emote and that certainly makes it difficult. I really like the verse "straining to unclothe his heart".... that really speaks to the essence of the poem; "bare poems, the poet bears the weight" very clever Jacob; I like it very much; (and by the way sometimes my poems are bare, not bear!!!!
Yours truly, B

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Betty,
j.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

So many people are afraid to express themselves in fear of being rejected, ridaculed or judge harshly. We the poets are the heroes of the written word.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Cowboy...yes, we have to be.

[poetgurl (Plainly Meg)]

with bare poems
stripped syllables sullen
they want to stay hidden

I really enjoy this part, This is written so well. much enjoyed Jacob

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Ang-X...

[Fran Marie]

It's just how it is
and just how we
poets are .

emotions
stripped bare .love
the scathing pen
being a rapist

nice work

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Fran,
j.

[MCS]

Jacob, you are on a roll my gifted poet friend.
Artists can’t help but to feel exposed; they pour their souls into the work.
The comfort comes from knowing that your work will at some point console those who have been broken by life.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Mary,
j.

[Nix is typing...]

Ahhh, Jacob, I'm so jealous! I wish I could write poems as well as you!!!
"the poet bears the weight
of naked emotions"
Such beautiful lines here!!

100/100

Nix ❤️

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Nix...for your kind words,
j.

[Ken Simm.]

I wish I could write a bare poem. I wish I could write as well as you. Excellent Jacob. Can't think why I am the first to comment. 'The pen is a scathing rapist'.... what a line

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Ken.
We just write differently...I love your work.
j.