two more more senryu

#5-Spill

 

in cluttered region

a heart geographically

relocates itself

#6-Spill

 

Hopscotch blues, feet skip

within the lines and without

but fingers adhere

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

2/7/2021

Reviews

[Betty Hermelee]

I like your two Senyru’s
The first I believe is about a heavy heart which has to get away from the pain that is causing it to be this way; move on!

The second one i believe is perhaps about
Finding in your heart, a place of peace and serenity, instead of hopscotching around in the blue, undecided, plant yourself where you are most comfortable; something is holding you back from doing this. Very lovely
Kindly, B

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I appreciate your kind words on my attempts at the one form I do.
thank you, Betty.
j.

[Betty Hermelee]

Of course!