Killing Sunrise

Killing Sunrise

 

 

bloody words

razor resourceful

she's abandoned

cut in the street

bleeding onto crows

which peck at the remains 

 

her love torn to shreds

barely covering the heart

she once wore proudly

until he knifed through her life

a stranger to her dreams

a conjuring

 

a forgetful face

staring into her tired eyes

and winking

as he removes the knife

from her memory

but still wakes with her every morning.

 

 

erin-cilberto

11/14/21

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

You said a handful in the poetry Jacob. Your words, hard and honest. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Coyote,
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Jacob.

[lessa (kenzie)]

Wow, makes me think of a sad world in different forms. Very powerful intriguing write.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Alex,
j.

[Patricia]

oh wow, all cutting, strong and to the point but unique as to your style. I can feel this one. Nice work j.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you so much for your kind words, Patricia.
j.

[Cherrie Palmer]

This poem is power packed with looming images. It flows for a smooth read. Without a heavy cadence ( which would have taken from its effect).

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Cherrie...your words on this poem mean a lot to me...I try not to waste words...always believed "less is more"---

[John the Baptist]

The cruelties people endure for years are heartbreaking. Bloody words indeed.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, John, yes.
j.

[Chris Shaw]

Brutal, what a relationship. I feel the bruises and the bleeding here. Killing sunrise is a powerful title. What a way to greet each new day. Some wounds never heal. They are too hurtful.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your understanding review, sis Chris,
j.

[Zoe Richardson]

Wait...were you spying on my last marriage? You just described it perfectly. This is such a heartbreaking, brutal description of something that should be a time of better deliverance. It's also a very stark and painful way of saying love is for the birds. I admire so much your ability to encapsulate so much emotion in a few lines.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Zoe,
j.

[light and ashes]

Oh my God, what a heart breaking story! So incredibly sad but well written, 100.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, light,
j.

[light and ashes]

You are welcome.

[shadrach hah]

Hi Jacob, this is such a powerful write. Your words are strong and raw with their emotion. Sometimes love can play its tricks on us and old loves stay within our minds. In our dreams, they lurk, ever ready to spring forward and open old scars. As always, your metaphorical write does paint such strong images within the mind. Another outstanding write, Jacob. Have a wonderful Friday....Mike.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind review, Mike,
j.

[shadrach hah]

You are welcome, Jacob. Have a wonderful Saturday....Mike.

[lightsong]

Old wound and pain yet still fresh as the morning's ray... powerful, so very powerful! I felt as I was reading the first verses someone whom was just being dumped, betrayed, then as I continued I was amazed that it was about an old love stuck in the heart and memory, because YOU MADE IT SO REAL that the agony is NOW! brilliantly striking emotive one Mr. J!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your very kind words, lightsong,
j.