Poem

Poem

A Poem by jacob erin-cilberto

Poem

 

 

my emotions live

within a split-level heart

the basement flooded

 

erin-cilberto

11/29/21

© 2021 jacob erin-cilberto


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A flooded basement. I know the feeling Jacob. Seem we cannot win and we can being swimming in s**t. I liked the honest words and thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 1 Month Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

thank you for your kind review, Coyote,
j.
drowned emotions laden with
the heaviest of tears ..i m feeling
the sad vibrations here...

well done


Posted 1 Month Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

thank you for your kind words, Fran,
j.
That feeling of drowning in sadness, but there is a light above it all that will prevail..

Posted 1 Month Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

thank you for your words, Stella,
j.
When we strip a poem down to its essence a senryu emerges- full and raw.
There is a difference in counting syllables to comply with a form , and impacting the reader. Really excellent piece.

Posted 1 Month Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

thank you for your kind review, Cherrie,
j.
Me too.... being a person who feels everything. Some things too intensely.
VERY well said, 100.

Posted 1 Month Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

thank you for your understanding words, light,
j.
light and ashes

1 Month Ago

You are very welcome, jacob.
Gasping for air. I feel a survivor here of pain struggling against the odds.

Life can be overwhelming at times dear J and those emotions an unwanted roller coaster ride.

Chris



Posted 1 Month Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

thank you for your words, Chris,
j.
How the tears fill the basement and the air is thin on higher ground.

Posted 1 Month Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

yes, very thin...
thank you, andrew,
j.
...and a truest poem comes when the truest emotions overloading and overflowing and overwhelming from that treasured split, You make me feel both... an open heart, and a wounded heart, and in both the split is real, the emotions are vibrant... and another brilliance from your overwhelmed pen.

Posted 1 Month Ago


Excellent senryu J. One that had me seeing a bit of myself in it to be honest. I tend to find myself spending a lot of time in that flooded basement of mine unfortunately. Great work my friend.

Posted 1 Month Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

thank you for your kind review, Carlos,
j.

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jacob erin-cilberto
jacob erin-cilberto

Carbondale, IL



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Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at a community college and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. I am here to read for inspiration from other po.. more..

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