Which version are you

Which version are you

 

 

be careful of deleted scenes

when the director's cut

comes out, you will be identified

understood

 

your plot will be analyzed

and dissected

the love story exposed

for what you never gave

 

and the audience

just might sway

towards the villain

and you will become

 

the uncredited star

of your own movie.

 

erin-cilberto

6/19/23

Reviews

[Miss Sharon]

When commenting on an authors' work I am never quite sure if we are supposed to "interpret" the poem or just simply say that we enjoyed the work. I believe there can be more than one interpretation of a poem, so I will simply say that I always enjoy reading you Jacob...you cause me to think! ~Sharon

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I say interpret the poems as you see them...you are the reader and once the poet allows them to be read they no longer belong to the author.
j.

[duff]

A persons viewpoint is theirs and I hope it's genuine. Double meanings. Nice work Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

absolutely true...thank you, duff,
j.

[Pete]

they say that the camera never lies but people certainly do. one can be shown only what someone wants you to see and not the full take. i'm the version in which i come out the best. pile on the makeup, dress me up and roll cameras. coming soon to a theatre near you ... :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I am buying a ticket...can't wait to see you...the previews were good.
j.

[Andra Dare]

Jacob, of course I cannot know what inspired this, but it speaks to me of betrayal in love, or in any trusting relationship. Sometimes that relationship is with community itself. My personal experience is that everyone cuts scenes (in their projections) from our lives, selves, stories, intentions, and so forth. That said, I have encountered those rare individuals who are truthful and devoted even when they're disappointed or hurt. This feels like grief beautifully painted. Thank you.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I really appreciate your words, Andra,
j.

[DIVYA]

One has to watch out for oneself, constantly. Or risk being misunderstood despite the very best of intentions, deeds and words. The world is full of trickery and the audience is so easily swayed. Your words are so deep here.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

even if the audience hated the movie, if the actor feels he or she did their best job in the part...that is all we can hope to do.
j.

[John the Baptist]

A movie metaphor for one whose contribution to a relationship was less than satisfactory: "the love story exposed/ for what you never gave".Perhaps the audience will be swayed toward the "villain," who may not have been that, when the film plays in theaters.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

the villain could be enticing...
j.

[D. Mansfield]

The beauty ,in all of that is I dont have to go see any of the cuts, if I choose not too. I tend to just make my own movies, they are reliable, self serving, mostly narrow minded, but they are my own. I enjoyed the thought provoking poem, thank you

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I enjoyed your response...thank you, D.
j.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

People have different versions of themselves to show in different situations

A woman may be a quiet church mouse submissive to her husband but a mean bee to her kids when he’s at work

A man may be the best mate best guy ever friend to his mates but go home and mentally or physically abuse his family and wife

We need to be our true selves all time

Sometimes the happiest people in public are the most depressed they put on an act and the saddest lonely looking shyest wallflower is happiest when she’s at home alone doing her own thing


I loved your metaphors one of your best here Jacob

The director can do fifty takes but never get the actor he needs

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I wish folks would be their true selves all the time. Too much hiding behind the kind smile.
j.

[Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)]

Yes
It was worse with the masks though we never saw their face
Apparently in Japan they taking lessons to learn how to smile again without mask

[Lorry]

Everyone is edited (and edits) Jacob. Liking for likes sake (for returned likes) and some, too many giving passive aggressive thoughts that they never think they will be judged on, but always are, because they think they are above everyone and everything else.
I remember a time when we called it delusional, but like everything else, they all now need their own special label to make them feel oh so special, which in itself used to mean above average, but nowadays it somehow means everyone!
At least I know I am more akin to watching the deleted scenes from platoon, but the specialists live in fluffy cloud magic land, deluding themselves that they and their opinions matter.
I'm just hoping I make the final cut 😊

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insights...and I am sure you will make the final cut, Lorry,
j.

[FGFRANKLIN]

"All the world's a stage" and when some have made their exits it's better not to ask for an encore lest time find us like Hamlet with a skull in our hands, pondering the meaning of life in soliloquy. I treasure your extended metaphors. They're always such a treat to read. I enjoyed.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"alas poor Yorick, I knew him Horatio"
Yes, exits need to be final.
thank you Fabian,
j.