the after days

the after days

 

 

 

 

the façade

a permanent smile

perpetual greeting 

with winking eyes

but sinking heart

 

an arrangement of grief

established years ago

when life chose to rupture

 

the walk is brisk,

affirmative

with purpose

but the severed soul

is the shadow behind

 

eternity is a creeping monument

an urn filled with questions

and the tears

that hold it dear.

 

 

erin-cilberto

6/27/23

Reviews

[Neville]

one can only hope, with more and more of them, the hurt will eventually get easier .. but don't they say that the first 24 hours are crucial .. or am I thinking of something else eternity .. no typo intended ..

N.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I like that. "something else eternity"
thank you, Neville...
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

The subject you wrote about. Something, we must grasp and we must accept Jacob.
"eternity is a creeping monument
an urn filled with questions
and the tears
that hold it dear."
I did like the strength and the meaningful words above. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you so much, Coyote...
j.

[John the Baptist]

The public face and the private one can bear entirely different expressions. Most of us present facades of some degree, but the speaker here seems to speak of a mask that conceals the scars of a past trauma, "an arrangement of grief." The last verse is somewhat mysterious, but it does give a hint as to how deep that wound was.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I appreciate your insight as always, John...you make me understand my own poems better than I do.read moreI appreciate your insight as always, John...you make me understand my own poems better than I do.
j.

[Andra Dare]

This is stunning, Jacob. The long twilight walk between mortality and eternity, the visible and the invisible. Thanks for this experience.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your read and kind comment.
j.

[Fran Marie]

The severed soul cast
in shadows behind
facade ' s ..a mask of pretense
left to face another day ..
this poem runs in a deep vein
of sad emotions..intense .
and well conveyed..
Nice work Jacob

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind review, Fran Marie,
j.

[Miss Sharon]

(an arrangement of grief established years ago when life chose to rupture) A sad commentary of this world in which we live. Poignant my friend. ~Sharon

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Sharon,
j.

[red93]

Profound and moving Jacob. Who knows what is going on behind the faces.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, red,
j.

[Chris Shaw]

This hurts my heart dear J.


Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Chris,
j.