the Path

the Path

 

two poems walk hand in haiku

by lake of lyrics

swirling syllables gently caress 

the soft dew between their bare toes

 

nature nurtures noble virtue

verily they stroll semantically 

whispering words that breeze

across the calm

 

hearts accord

according to the setting sun

and the poems clasp accordingly

lovers write into each other's heart

 

they become a sonnet

a longer variation than three lines

always a beginning

and then rhyme times them into gifted gentleness

 

sweet scent of metaphor

smiling into an embrace

a third poem joins

then a fourth a fifth and so on

 

is Modern American poetry

a village

a quaint quatrain

or a quiet riot

 

wryly spoken

in roses

that petrify

before they bloom.

 

 

erin-cilberto

3/12/24

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

wryly spoken
in roses that petrify
before they bloom

Dead before they started. Poems or relationships or maybe both. I think I’d aim for a sonnet rather than a three liner. A bit more substance. Somehow I get the feeling here, that the journey doesn’t always go to plan. You can end up with something else. That’s where I drifted dear j. Beautifully penned and brimful of imagery.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Chris,
j.

[nadia dmitri]

WOW! This idea is so cool and clever, I love the line "nature nurtures noble virtue". Your diction and formatting is amazing and captivating, great work :))

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, nadia,
j.

[Einstein Noodle]

we write and write and write with honest intent and wishes for a solid wedding but alas ... on a linear line it's age that is forever the winner ... we dust off such well worn themes and renew them with our own flavors ... can't help but think when it may all petrify .. unmoldable and .......... too old :( then I listen to Paul McCartney's https://youtu.be/ap87QgZKTNw?si=nCZQcgxDaOCyNlrS ;)
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"It isn't silly, it isn't silly, it isn't silly at all"
Thank you, E.
j.

[Einstein Noodle]

:))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))) no ... it isn't .. never ever ever never! love on ya brother!