Fantasy

My fantasy story.

We both make a wish. As the shooting star passes by. I look into your eyes. I see more than just two brown eyes. I can see the stars in the sky. I could see you staring back at me. I looked up at the sky and you said

 

'I want to give you something.'

 

 I looked at you and you had a small box in your hands. You place it on my lap and said

 

'This is for you.'

 

You smiled and I said

 

'I'll open it later.'

 

You hugged me and you walked home. I looked down at the box and as I opened it I gasped and felt such joy inside. It was a diamond ring, and it had a small note inside.

 

It had said

 

'Look up at the sky.'

 

 I saw a message written in the stars what was written was:

 

'I know that you don't believe in love, but I love you. I mean it and I always will.Will you find it in your heart to marry me?'

 

I cried when I finished reading it. It was a dream come true. I had found love even when I thought it did not exist. I put on the ring and then out of nowhere you came and hugged me.

 

'I will always love you.'

 

 Is what I heard you say.

 

 

Author's Note

I know I said that I won't write about love anymore... but this came to my mind today and I thought it was a nice little story. Thanks if you read this, comment and tell me what you think. Hope you enjoy it! (:

Reviews

[Angelauthor1204]

nicely done.

[Vyctm]

This is not my favorite love story do far. First of all it is really short. I guess this could not really be extended much but it could be added to another sotry and complement it very well. As for your depiction of the scene, I could see it fairly well. You focused on what was important to this story and you ran with it. I applaud you for that.
I see much potential in you. Keep on working and you may be the number one romance author in our part of the world. Keep it up :)

[Bee]

sweet and touching. :)

[nono]

haha awwwww so cute! Nice idea! I love it it's just to cute. And I can see everything like it's right in front of me nice job!

[Closed Account]

aww, this is so cute. I love it! Great job(:

[~Lizzy♬]

I love the way you put the fantasy into a romance short story. It's very good but, not really descriptive. I really liked the part about her wish because that has always been my wish since my first boyfriend. ;)

[My Fair Lady]

I like how your fantasy "proposal" was given by someone who knew you well enough to know that you would say that you would open it later... so he wrote you a note. That says a lot about the relationship.

[(JR) Joshua Hernandez]

very nice, you have a very sweet heart, very nice

[KaySea]

this is so sweet

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

awww how sweet i like it
Great Job