Regret

Regret

By: Ethan West

The grass sways in time with my heart

Funny how these things do start

I was not here a moment ago

But now that I am, I am here for the show

My spirit elated I run through the grass

The grandest of things I hurriedly past

Till found myself at the end of my path

My heart had then sunk at my pitiful laugh

My journey was over and now it had ended

The beautiful grass and field no more

I ran through it all and never respected

The beauty of life I would leave evermore

Author's Note

Any feedback is greatly appreciated! Thank you!

Reviews

[Melody]

Oh this sounds like an interesting journey. :) I loved the last two stanzas the most because when I read the second to last I was confused I was thinking "where'd the rhyme go?" Lol, but then I finished it and once again you stunned me with rhyme pattern change. :) From aa to abab. A great couplet. Good job.

[ewest1220]

Thanks! I think the original intent of this one was to make it a sonnet. But then I changed my mind just as soon as I started lol

[Melody]

Lol you're welcome.

[Androglossia]

We use to say we wouldn't change anything in our lives if we could because we don't know how it would change us today. The truth is, nearly anybody who believes they would not go back and change a thing if they could are denying the truth that they need forgiveness for at least one mistake they've done. Life is not perfect and regret is as universal emotion as love or fear, and it can be nearly as powerful but the only thing that can beat regret is to forgive yourself.

Your writing shows personal regrets of the wonderful things you failed to notice in your life's journey. But bare in mind that everything happens for a reason and if you won't learn to forgive yourself those mistakes will haunt you to your deathbed.

Very expressive. Thank you for another good read.

[ewest1220]

Wow thank you for another detailed and informative review! It's always a pleasure to hear from you thank you so much for reading!

[Alex]

I love the rhyming you have done here! its not exact but close enough to catch my tongue and give it some real rhythm!

[ewest1220]

Thanks!

[F.P. Chat]

I think I am starting to get used to poetry in here and although I did not shudder with this one, as with the rest I have read from you, it was interesting with a nice rythm.

[ewest1220]

Thanks! I'm glad you liked it!

[Jordan A. Wilson]

sounds like someone at the end of their life realizing they may have wasted it. powerful.

[ewest1220]

Thanks! Glad you liked it!

[Destinyxi]

Very nicely written, this poem is oozing with the title, regret.

[ewest1220]

Thanks! I'm glad you liked it!

[Baby Ricochet]

I'd have rhymed grass with a*s but that's just me. God you're so awesome. Maybe I should just stick to dirty limericks

[ewest1220]

Thanks! I'm really glad you liked it and for the record I suck at limericks of any kind so kudos to you my friend!

[SashaBella]

A beautiful poem of moving to fast though life and not taking the time to see. I loved your writing.

[ewest1220]

Thanks! I'm really glad to hear that you like my work thank you so much for reading!

[Rhea752]

this is a great poem of a beautiful desperate journey. :D once again you have stunned me with the power of your words. great write!!!!! :)

[ewest1220]

And once again you've made me blush with the power of your reviews O.o that's right I went there! On a more serious note I really love that you enjoy my work thank you so much for reading!

[Rhea752]

thank you for posting all of this. i really enjoy your work and am seriously considering buying your book. on a more taunting note maybe i won't... i guess you'll just have to see. :P

[ewest1220]

lol ouch! If you do buy it I would really love to have your input on it. That book has 70 of my absolute best works inside it and they haven't seen any real review yet O.o No pressure of course ;)

[ewest1220]

Either way I'm thrilled that you enjoy my work and honored! Make sure to send me read requests because I love your work as well!

[Rhea752]

pshh no pressure at all lol. and i believe i sent you read request that you haven't answered yet. :P

[ewest1220]

Really? Sorry I'm digging through like 40 right now lol working on it XP

[Rhea752]

BWAHAHAHA i haven't had many read requests. that's both bad and good

[ewest1220]

Oh you'll love this, like 10 of them are stories. Like, full length stories!!! They're all quite good though so I can't complain ^_^

[Rhea752]

hey stories are better than full fledged books right? i've had someone send me a 35 chapter book before.

[Tommy]

There are places where the grasses grow tall, making the journey seem endless, these travels though meadows and over greensward hills. I don’t know if life is built on a rolling plateau, but if it is, we all must learn to fly, or scale the cliffs towards eternity…

Great Write Ethan!!!
RLG,
Tommy

[ewest1220]

Gotta ask is that a quote you have in the first part there? If not is should be! lol thank you so much I'm glad you enjoyed my work!

[Coyote Poetry]

Great wisdom in the poem. Good to stop and smell the roses and enjoy the day. I like the description leading to a lesson.
'I ran through it all and never respected
The beauty of life I would leave evermore"
A strong ending to a excellent poem.
Coyote

[ewest1220]

Very true very true. I'm glad you liked it!