The Blood Paradise - A Haiku.

𝐋𝐨𝐧𝐠 𝐭𝐫𝐚𝐧𝐪𝐮𝐢𝐥 𝐦𝐢𝐝𝐧𝐢𝐠𝐡𝐭.
𝐀 𝐡𝐞𝐥𝐝, 𝐜𝐡𝐚𝐨𝐭𝐢𝐜 𝐊𝐚𝐬𝐡𝐦𝐢𝐫 𝐜𝐫𝐢𝐞𝐬
𝐚𝐭 𝐭𝐡𝐞 𝐩𝐞𝐫𝐟𝐞𝐜𝐭 𝐛𝐥𝐨𝐨𝐝.

Reviews

[Eilis]

Your description ‘held, chaotic’ is excellent. So many places are suffering under a yoke like this. The world seems upended in many ways.

And even though you are telling us about Kashmir, you are also saying something that extends beyond borders and can be relevant to many around the world trying to surmount or make sense of suffering and cruelty. It’s a troubling reality.

[Fairy Khan]

Thanks. :)
You're right. The world is in deep trouble, indeed.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Indeed those not caught up in such dilemmas cannot fathom the depth of suffering and angst. An apt statement in short verse. One small syllable extra in the second line which at present is 8 instead of 7.

[Fairy Khan]

I think there are only 7 syllables in the second line since 'chaotic' and 'cries' have dipthongs. So, it's only 7.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Yes perhaps that could be.

[barleygirl]

A Pakistani friend was just educating me about this, texting this morning. You are amazingly artful in your expression, given this must impact life in dramatically tough ways! Your first line is an exquisite blend of hoping for peace in the middle of dark chaos. Last line is nicely symbolic (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Fairy Khan]

All we can do is be hopeful, now. Thanks a lot. :))))

[Lea Sheryn]

You say a lot in a few words. Excellent!

[Fairy Khan]

Thanks a lot. :)

[Lea Sheryn]

You're very welcome. :-)))

[jacob erin-cilberto]

wow, you pack a punch with this one, Fairy...
a strong political statement in senryu...
and what a line to end it..."at the perfect blood" wonderful use of oxymoron.
j.

[Fairy Khan]

Thanks a lot, Jacob. Although, it’s more of a haiku than a senryu.

[Digvijay Singh]

Sad but i see no near future where Kashmir is paradise again. Sad

[Fairy Khan]

If paradise is troubled, it’s still paradise. We Kashmiris are hopeful people, and we believe that chaos is the beginning of things falling into place.

[Digvijay Singh]

True. But we also can not ignore history. Kashmir's been chaotic since 47 and it's gettin bloodier with moving years. Sorry for I'm not being optimistic here.

[Fairy Khan]

Change is constant, dear friend. If we take history into account, then we should be more hopeful, because revolution and change are well known historical events. All we can do is have faith.

[Fairy Khan]

All the nations which are now independent and democratic have struggled for their rights; and so is Kashmir.

[Digvijay Singh]

Hope is all we have now