Girl In The Window

Sometimes no one notices the pain.

 

Girl looking through a window

People walking by slowly

None stop to meet her eyes

Life goes on and time fades

 

Mother comes home weary

Supporting both by herself

Father seen in one place only

Gentlemen’s club down the road

 

Girl staring down at the ground

Wishing her feet would move

Take her to someplace special

Someplace she could call home

 

Boy knocks on the door one day

Holds the girl, makes her smile

She finds an escape in his eyes

He sees a free trip for pleasure

 

Her daughter missing for a week

Mother doesn’t notice a thing

Time goes on, the boy gets tired

Girl left in an alley all alone

 

Stumbling home, Mother ignores

Girl bleeds with tears in her eyes

Father appears and shakes his head

Says her daughter’s a waste of space

 

Girl just looks out of the window

Watches people passing by

No one stops to realize her pain

Life goes on and time fades

 

Author's Note

Idc what you say, I cried when I wrote this.

Reviews

[A. Siemens]

I could see why you could cry over this. It's a really sad thought(s). When you take time to ponder the things you see, like a homeless guy on the street, a middle-aged cashier it's almost sad to look back and think of the dreams the must have had and the lives the lived. Poetry isn't (I've got to admit) my favourite thing, but I do enjoy some kinds. I like how you leave some "imagination room" within the poem in which the reader can ponder the feelings of the characters.

[Kathryn Star, Shine!]

This is profound wording... I've read a lot of books, and it reads like a 'structure' to the beginning and ending of a good novel. It also reads like a good poem that sticks in your mind for days. You think about the words, as you ponder on your own... (by the way, loved your bio... I grew up in the country and know how it can be). I could feel the emotion yet the pushing away... almost like tides of the ocean. I won't forget your poem... it will stay in my mind. ks

[EminemAddict]

I liked it. I got terry eyed when i read this. Very sad.

Oh and thanks for the review. I know its a little sloppy Im not good at the whole description thing.

[Poeticpiers]

very sad little tale too close to the truth for comfort.Nicely presented in poetic prose

[Domo]

It seems to me that you were sad or lonely when you wrote this. I think this poem is good and is sad to read. Thanks for sharing this poem! :)

[dreamer492]

You did great on conveying the girl's feelings of loneliness.
It's definitely sad that she thinks nobody sees her pain...

[Obsidian Blackbird McNi..]

sad or what not this is a ballad. and your dedication to displaying the pain of the main character is admirable.

[XxXwhoiamXxX]

Very emotional.
Well done with the writing

[Jemma]

Very sad. >.< I can relate to the feeling of no one been there. To feel completely alone. Then to have someone show up, someone you can trust, only to betray you. Then going through again like nothing ever happened. No one noticing. No one caring.

Beautiful write.

Ps. Sorry it took me so long to read >.

[...MysteryGirl...]

This is amazing..
So sad and emotional.
I could really feel the pain the girl was feeling..
Great job!