Sweat and Love

Free verse

Sweat and Love

You trace slowly, 

starting a fire, 

your passions ablaze 

and soaring higher.

Sweat beading like morning dew,

Love's delicate touch 

between me and you.

Reviews

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A passionate piece inded and like many of your works it concentrates on that one magic relationship which fels complete yet is a subservient surender to itself. You write these rhyming pieces with great pathos I wonder what power you could put into free verse?

[Farjana Shah Chaity]

Thank you for your thoughtful feedback. I appreciate your perspective on my rhyming pieces. I enjoy working with rhyme, It offers a different kind of poetic freedom and can convey emotions in unique ways.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I agree dear lady but free verse is just that, 'freedom to express' without the 'corset' of rhyme lol!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

My latest piece is rhyming so I have nothing against rhyme, in fact I envy those who can find the lines to connect.

[Farjana Shah Chaity]

Sometimes it naturally comes, and sometimes it doesn't.

[emmajoygreen]

Finely written, emotions displayed with both pride and excitement about a time with a very special other.

' You trace slowly,
starting a fire .. ..

Sweat beading like morning dew,
Love's delicate touch
between me and you.'

Such warmth in your short but remarkably visual poem, Farjana

[DIVYA]

Wow, what intense imagery. Your words are breathtaking from start till end. I really like the unique touch you gave passion here. Well done, dear Farjana.

[Farjana Shah Chaity]

Thank you for stopping by and sharing your thoughts, DIVYA.

[Betty Hermelee]

A lovely brevity poem with a good rhyme, touching upon passion and desire and how we sweat and become fire when deeply engaged....like this...well written
Warmly, B

[Farjana Shah Chaity]

Thank you for your lovely comment Betty!

[Betty Hermelee]

You're very welcome Farjana
Warmly,
B

[willweb]

Sometimes that is all it takes, just a touch to ignite those flames of passion. Beautifully penned.

[Farjana Shah Chaity]

Thank you for sharing your thoughts!

[Neville]

this comes as close to intimacy as it gets without being censored .. I am enjoying your ink mistress F .. N :)

[Farjana Shah Chaity]

thank you for your nice words ~ chaity