Curiosity kills(:

Curiosity kills(:

A Poem by Jane Doe
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Horror

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(: Curiosity kills

The doorbell rings,
Making odd dongs and dings,
She races to the door to greet,
But what she sees you would not like to meet.

A head hanging,
From the roof banging,
Against the glass door,
The head of an acquaintance, for it was a head of a w***e.

She slams the door shut,
Heart racing, tears streaming shes scared she might find the body of the s**t,
The dog barks,
On her back something begins to make marks.

She swirls and screams,
As once again the doorbell rings,
This time it is not the head but a figure, 
a ,mysterious, decked out in black, ski mask on, figure.
 
             To be continued...... Possibly.

© 2012 Jane Doe


Author's Note

Jane Doe
Ya like I think I'm pretty sucky at all genres

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This is creepy, scary, and tormenting all at the same time.... The rhythm is a little hard to follow, but its a good write... Maybe you can try rewording someof the things, and Take out some of the Redundant words Maybe it would flow better :)

Still a creative and wonderful write :) Great Job :)

If you Message me I can show you what I mean if your interested :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


Quite unnerving! This is a great piece with a good flow and a story behind it characterised by twists as in an action film. Keep that pen moving 'cause I'm pressing for the sequel!

Posted 12 Years Ago


best poem of 2012 thus far =DD 100000 likes***

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This was an interesting poem. You did a really nice job on this poem. Yes, curiosity can kill. It's not good to open the door to strangers. As you learn on all the crime shows these days. I liked the message. Good write. :D
Thanks for sharing.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Hey its the Lil Pinay Princess...whaaa the whaaat, there was a head of a w***e?! Holy Spanoli, body of s**t!! Whaaa the whaaat! I hope everything is okay...I would of been scared out of my mind...sheesh. Nice rhythm to your poem. :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is a really nice poem so far. And I only say so far, because it doesn't seem finished, and I really hope that you do continue it. Your word choice creates a setting of emotions, making me get into the moment and wanting more!

Posted 12 Years Ago


You are not "sucky" at all genres LOL! You are VERY good at writing!! I love how intense this is!! If you do continue it, I'd be intrigued as to how you'd go on with this. Great job! =]

Posted 12 Years Ago



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