Her silence, my pain

 

I was out of tears by the time I left her apartment.  I was staggering to find my way. The feeling in my heart can only be described as what it would feel like to be hit by a plane �" and survive it. Yes, I had found the letters from him. Tears welled up as questions exited my shivering lips. Her stone stare became even more shocking.  The pain on my face was obvious as the silence continued. She was fixing her hair in the mirror in the bathroom. She maintained the dead air. Nothing.  My words stumbling as I tried to speak and make sense of this. Hands shaking, holding the divulging evidence. The only sound was my quivering breath and sniffling nose. The room grew cold. Her face grew hot. Yet, she still remained silent, twirling and swirling her hair with extreme concentration, as if I wasn’t there.  The tense air between us built as the silence continued to intensify. Finally she mouthed the words that seemed they were well rehearsed, “I think you should leave.” �"  The only complete sentence I could construct was “I love you, please talk to me”. Without as much as a look, as her eyes were locked on her reflection in the mirror, she closed the bathroom door. The plane just sucked me up into the engine well.

 

I know there must have been something that made her blood move throughout her body, but I was sure it wasn’t a heart.

Author's Note

Based on a true story

Reviews

[justjenn_2u]

Very intense glance into a man being betrayed!

In short text, I was able to breath in his crashing emotions of her demise. I could feel his shock and pain staking force of facing a grim reality of her untruthfulness.

You have a profound way with words and you always leave me wanting to read more your work. Good job, my friend!

[Valentine]

This tells so much in a short tale..It gives me the shivers as it brings back memories of my own..This is a super story..God bless..Valentine

[Nicole Renee]

I thought this was really sad and touching. I'm sorry that this had to really happen to you. ^_^"

-Nicole

Wow I really like this story it shows how I felt with my recent Ex. I am also really speachless for this It's amazing that you could describe the hurt so well.

[Imperfection]

I'm speechless.

This is one of those things that I'm not sure I can review simply because I don't have the words.
This is an outstanding piece of writing.
I do not know how it must have felt...haven't been at the receiving end. But just reading through this made me shiver.

And yes, the last line. How on earth did that strike you?

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Wow - wonderful writing...great ending. Very compelling and heartwrenching. Excellent work. Thank you.
Light,
Siddartha

[Kara Emily Krantz]

jesus this is a great little piece.

"Without as much as a look, as her eyes were locked on her reflection in the mirror, she closed the bathroom door. The plane just sucked me up into the engine well."

I mean hellow? that is brilliant. and your last line was a suckerpunch right in the gut.

my GOD have I been here, and even though it hurt to my core to read thsi through, it also gave me relief, to know someone could put into such great words those feelings... those moments... that pain. and you described the pain so factually - we could come up with our own reaction, rather than just giving us your angst.

great job. damn. and i'm sorry. big hugs