Ill Padre

Everybody knows,

 no one speaks

silence is golden and deadly

you won't live forever 

your amoebas' keep chomping at my brain

you've successfully stigmatized my prosperity

your silent sword

has yielded me mute 

You'll be gone and I'll live on 

coasting along simmering in this shadow

amidst your past

 unforgivable transgressions

Absolution will utterly never be granted

unless you find it in another dimension

if for some inescapable, 

irrational reasoning,

you repent 

 unspeakable truths,

should penance 

forgive your trespasses

IF they shall open the gates of paradise to you

I'd gladly burn in 

hell for eternity

Reviews

[LA Lorena]

An interesting blend of religion, truth and condemnation. Unfortunate, but somehow understandable that you would condemn the innocent to the fires of Hell in the afterlife too. I guess after being licked by flames for so long, you get used to the heat of the kitchen.

[Frieda P]

On occasion the heat in the kitchen is tolerable but you know how those flare ups catch you by surprise...thanks LA.

[Annabelle Lee]

ohhh haha how ironic is th. I enjoyed this one as well

[MOON]

No mincing of words here. Damned! Powerful write.

[Frieda P]

ha I'm not good at tact in these situations! ;-)

[kublakhan27]

I seem to have missed this one...obviously it packs quite the punch, and from an interpretive standpoint, it reinforced the notion for me that death is a scary thing no matter how much sugar you coat it with...to quote Jim Morrison, the future's uncertain and the end is always near...

[Frieda P]

Oh man, you're slaying me here, first Leonard and now the Doors...whew!

[kublakhan27]

Haha well I am a classic rock buff which you're probably noticing now ;) Leonard actually mentioned once that he met the Doors in the 60s when both he and the band were just breaking through (no pun intended haha) but apparently Jim was having one of his bad days so he didn't get to talk to him much :P

[Frieda P]

ha when wasn't Jim having a bad day? All artists are temperamental, creative geniuses, but to snub Leonard, he must have been on drugs. ha!

[kublakhan27]

Haha very true, but you're right, that's artists for you :P LC has also admitted to a brief fling with substances, but insists he got it out of his system before it got out of hand...maybe meeting Jim was a motivating factor haha :P

[Frieda P]

I always thought 'Dance Me to the End of Love was about his addictions, then I found out it's about concentration camps. I still listen to it with an addicted ear though. ;-)

[kublakhan27]

Haha yeah and you talk about ME being cryptic ;P It seems like everything he writes is filtered through an erotic context to some degree :P

[Frieda P]

ha must be why I adore him ;-P

[kublakhan27]

Haha like the other zillion women that have adored him over the years ;P

[Frieda P]

Shut up, you're raining on my freaking parade! ;-P

[kublakhan27]

Haha sorry...I don't know why but I always feel the need to point that out ;P

[Frieda P]

He did write a song about that, women loved him for his music and how he made them feel...can't think of the title off the top of my head with this darn hangover...but yes, he knew that, and well deserved I might add. :-)

[kublakhan27]

Haha hangover? You never mentioned that :o I'm not sure of the title myself, it'll probably come to me out of the blue :)

Btw I have to leave for hockey soon so I'll be away for a while...see you soon if not tonight ;)

[Frieda P]

K k....don't break anything especially your writing hand ;-)

[kublakhan27]

Oh I will definitely take care of that, don't worry ;)

[Lover Of Words]

Wow very good!!!!

[Frieda P]

thanks kelsey...

[Ahmad Cox]

Very powerful words and message. I got chills reading this poem.

[Frieda P]

The write wasn't so hot either, thanks Ahmad.

[Emerald Seas]

Nice bite to this one. Aren't we all damned in one way or another? Love the art work too. Everyone has a demon or two to fight, everyone has a sin or two to answer... Such is life. Nice writing - thoroughly enjoyed!

[Avocations of Amber]

And you thought my poem about winter gave you a chill..... ;)

[Frieda P]

Ha! Touche.

[s y e]

This good although that freakin picture scared shizz outta me :// not cool mama F, not cool!
This was beautifully written, beautiful words. Loved it as always! xo

[DIVYA]

There's no absolution for some transgressions...
that leave only a burning legacy of eternal hate...in all dimensions

Frieda, a very powerful poem from you. I can feel ominous black clouds rumbling under the silence. 100/100