Raven Song

Wrote this whilst listening to Ghost Song by Max Ablitzer, music included.

I flew with the dark raven

   for he was the only one

   who could taste or see

   such  insanely sweet madness in me

   he perched himself right astride

   without cawing a sound

   naught a lecture to take care

Mockingly looming overhead

   he stared me straight in the eye

So smooth and lovingly lush he sailed 

   soared within me to new heights

   before we burst into fluid flight 

I took him in languidly 

   hauntingly mysterious elixir

   a cryptic spirit unto himself

Cracked half a vitriolic sad smile

   whilst he prepared me for sin

Knocking back at my door

  to taunt me raving yet afresh

  he sing songs his intoxication into me,

  then takes me for a mystical rendezvous

  raven's song so tastefully contrived

              we sing together,

                           twisted in consumption

                                                   the dark raven in me

                                                                    never judges  

 

Author's Note

Reviews

[Tai Ryens]

Mystical, black ravens taking you out on ethereal dates and slowly embedding itself into your soul, becoming forever a part of you (hence the singing together in the end, and the dark raven IN you never judging). What a dark centerpiece for a love felt by a person trying to empty themself.. Well done.

[Frieda P]

You dug deep for this one Tai, always love to read your interpretations, glad you enjoyed this one...thanks so much.

[annie lee]

full of mysterious symbolism, gorgeous images and haunting refrain. quite, quite lovely. sorry, i can't capitalize because my little cat bella has decided that my arm is where she wants to nap.

[Frieda P]

Oh you made my day annie lee, you said quite enough, thanks so much...

[OTownPete]

Clever stuff here Fireda. Interesting how the raven has become synonymous with the onset of madness. Your friend in words, Pete

[Frieda P]

Thanks Pete, really jazzed you enjoyed this one.

[Tom]

That old raven is such a tempter..... I thought the P after Frieda was for poetess but it could also be for Poe ? (Edgar Allen)

[Frieda P]

Ooooh thank you so much Tom, this is my favorite poem I've written, I actually was satisfied with this one, I'm truly thrilled you read it...

[Tom]

I do enjoy a walk on the dark side now & again Frieda, as you do too !

[Frieda P]

Very much so, variety is the spice of life, I can't stay stuck in one genre for too long, again thanks a million Tom!

[Tom]

The pleasures all mine Frieda!

[redflutterby]

I think I experienced the raven myself Saturday night. I do believe I was flying with the dark winged one in my Jim Beam induced haze. Haha... unfortunately the video won't show up on my phone but I'll look it up on YouTube. ;-)xo

[Frieda P]

Haha, yes that's exactly what it feels like, so glad you read this one Red, it's my favorite....when you hear the music you'll know why. ;-) x

[redflutterby]

I'm going to listen right now... xo

[Abby]

This was beautifully written, Frieda, my Beethoven In My Loins writing friend. :) You did a fantastic job with this, and I loved it. :)

[Frieda P]

Ha that made me smile Abby...thanks so much!

[Abby]

You are more than welcome!

[Pete Langley]

Don`t we all look for the raven`s touch to our order....it sours us to the exotic, to the extraordinary, where we can explore parts that are normally buried, exciting us with the allure and danger of the unknown. Superb images of dangerous liaisons, Frieda. P.

[Frieda P]

Dangerous liaisons indeed, I wrote this about drinking specifically....thrilled you liked it Pete.

[NGenieL]

This is amazing... I have no words other than "amazing"

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much, this is actually my favorite, so thrilled you liked it.

[Sethnicity]

I think this is one of your finest erotica... the metaphor is continuous and fluid. Just when you think it's climaxed you show the ropes of repetition; pulsing like convulsing muscles in aftershock to carry through the final lines. and how do I love ravens... a new affinity for me but it only takes one time to understand and become hypnotized by the midnight watcher. Great job. it took me there... ;)

[Frieda P]

I'm loving your review on this, can't tell you happy I am that it affected you...love this music, it's mesmerizing, as is your review, thanks so much Sethnicity!

[Gerald Parker]

Ya, very mysterious and sinuous. It has a penetrative quality, sharp like the raven's beak. When I read poems like this, with their haunting quality, I feel the poet has reached another space, like another universe where things happen differently. Thank you letting me into this world. G

[Frieda P]

Sorry I missed this, thrilled you enjoyed it, this happens to be my favorite and yes it's true, I had that feeling whilst writing this one, thanks so much Gerald.

[Gerald Parker]

Welcome

[beautiful dreamer]

wow! awesome write frieda

[Frieda P]

So very pleased you like this one bd....

[beautiful dreamer]

sure did ;)

[Frieda P]

I don't think anyone really understands it, but that's alright, the raven gets it..... ;-)

[beautiful dreamer]

eh its okay to be confused is a good thing

[Frieda P]

Lol now you tell me!

[beautiful dreamer]

lol :P

[Frieda P]

;-)