Flammable Dandelion Mutterings

Flammable Dandelion Mutterings

A Poem by Frieda P

i drink you in like fine french cognac
breathe you like springtime's essence
you lift my spirits like a butterfly
when you flutterby to touch my heart,
i've lived in a castle with no vision
let down my hair in portend reluctance
trusting hands caught my presence
i lost my balance and toppled over
still wary of trespassing recalcitrance
breathless i caught a glimpse
of what I'd been missing
like sweet poetry I liquefied
a lovely taste upon the lips
still frightful after all these years
your stanza brought me to my knees
i kneel in this verse, inward hesitation
in wait for an exposition to slay
my prayer is a chant of endless mutterings
let this warm light dissipate any nagging doubts
so that i may dwell in the music of harmony's concerto
sweetness of dandelions youthful yearnings

© 2013 Frieda P


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I pray you always dwell in the music of harmony's concerto dear Frieda. This poem nourished me this morning, washed over me in warm breezes and gave me breath, where none had existed before. This is absoluetly beautiful. the fact that you manage to share a small piece of your creative vision each day with us is a truly wondrous gift.

Posted 8 Years Ago


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Frieda P

8 Years Ago

As your kind words always nourish me Jack...thank you never seems enough. x



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Sweet poetry indeed...I hope this is what happens when people read my stuff ;) Gorgeous piece...nicely done Frieda :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


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Frieda P

8 Years Ago

Thanks Steve, exactly how I feel about yours, I'm surprised you didn't say I wrote this one about yo.. read more
kublakhan27

8 Years Ago

Haha I'm not that presumptuous...just wishful thinking this time around ;P
Hmm, sounds like someone has gotten under your poetic skin in that unnerving, tingling way :) wonderful writing, Frieda!

Posted 8 Years Ago


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Frieda P

8 Years Ago

O.O Poetic skin, I like that a lot!
Another great piece of work and art done masterfully and with elegance... We don't know what we will do if you were not on this site pushing the bar higher and higher ( compliment )...:)

Posted 8 Years Ago


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Sami Khalil

8 Years Ago

That is true...:) Chow
Frieda P

8 Years Ago

hahahaha ciao bello ;-)
Sami Khalil

8 Years Ago

^^~^^ :)
Ah. A fine write indeed. Succinct.

Posted 8 Years Ago


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Frieda P

8 Years Ago

Thanks for your visit and kind review Joshua.
"I caught a glimpse of what I'd been missing"--*sigh* this rings so true to me. I've given myself over to things so many times in an effort to "recieve" what I give, and yet it doesn't seem to work out. Maybe I should stone my exterior...paint myself into a statue so that no one can get inside and mess me up.

Beautifully written piece. I am always amazed at your technical ability when it comes to word choice and phrasing. Well done.

Posted 8 Years Ago


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Frieda P

8 Years Ago

Hmm that doesn't sound like a good way either Friday, I've tried it, have no good answers but it's a.. read more
Girl Friday (Sarah W.)

8 Years Ago

True words
There is a mixture of a strong woman and innocent child in this write. Love this fairy-tale line:
"I've lived in a castle with no vision
let down my hair in portend reluctance
trusting hands caught my presence...

Words dance from your pen, Frieda!


Posted 8 Years Ago


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Frieda P

8 Years Ago

What an absolutely splendid review Rita, thanks so much, you put a huge smile on my face!
Rita L. Sev

8 Years Ago

:)
Frieda P

8 Years Ago

You know I see 'dance' and I can't contain myself! :-)
"i kneel in this verse, inward hesitation"
That one line felt so reverent. We need to have moments that we surrender without giving up. This poem felt like a healing; a remembrance of better days without regret or angst...
One of my favorite poems you have published girl!

Posted 8 Years Ago


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 David Scott

8 Years Ago

You have established that well. In my opinion, yes, you are very special. :)
Frieda P

8 Years Ago

You know what I meant! ;-P
 David Scott

8 Years Ago

I'm sure I have no idea...;)
Well to say you have a way with words dear Frieda would be an understatement. I don't know anyone who can weave together such words, phrases and metaphors so often, so well!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

8 Years Ago

John, I must say that means an awful lot to me, coming from a poet that I much admire, thanks so mu.. read more
"you lift my spirits like a butterfly
when you flutterby to touch my heart,"
A beautiful poem. I like the use of the dandelion. Made the poem have reason and purpose. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

8 Years Ago

Thanks Coyote, glad you enjoyed this one.
It is hard to take the firm steps into trust and belief when our judgement appears to have been so cloudy in the past. Just remember, those dandelions are resilient little things. That weed killer only works so long before they are poking their sunny face right back up out of the ground. Ever hopeful are these buttercup wannabes :)

A beautiful write, Frieda. :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


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Frieda P

8 Years Ago

Ha buttercup wannabes, love it! Made me smile, aren't we all? Thanks so much Rogue. :-)
Rogue

8 Years Ago

:)
Frieda P

8 Years Ago

Have a great weekend :-)

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If you want to know me, read my poetry, it's all in there. I am a mother of three sons (my finest moments) a sister, a survivor and a little bit crazy. I lost my beloved sister to suicide, so you'll.. more..

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