Gypsy Violin ♪

Thanks Emma Joy, your words inspired this one; "be a violin or whatever.. sweep yourself across the strings"..........

Gypsy at night in my soul

I play the violin

strumming to my heart's content

of my stories untold

Moon winks ornery with dismay

as the furious tunes beguile,

the skies all a fluster

they've turned a dismal grey

Ravens take flight in their delusions

swaying frenzied to the memories

upon my disenchanted head

dancing darkly to my allusions

Author's Note

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this is so poe-ish...but reminds me of sherlock holmes in Murder by Decree, playing the violin after he went to see annie crook at the mental institution and how he cried for her...even as he was playing..

the violin is a beautiful instrument but can play such sad, haunting notes.

this poem is sad and haunting.

[Frieda P]

So glad it took you there jacob, the feel I was going for, thanks so much.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Dancing to your own beat, that is how the rhythm of life should be... never duplicate, only orchestrate your own tune. What a lovely verse of a free spirit.

[Frieda P]

You're too kind my friend, thanks Dale.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Just speaking the truth according to me.

[Astro]

It's wonderful what inspiration can do. This one got stronger and stronger as it went Frieda. I don't know why but this line stuck with me, "as the furious tunes beguile,". Great bit about the crows too. Nice one.

[Frieda P]

Jazzed you liked this one Astro, thanks so much.

[kublakhan27]

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=l9K-3JTzP6I&list=PLF5F420AB92D0D542&index=8

[Frieda P]

Oi, facepalm, where were you when my brain was on the fritz my friend? ;-) x

[kublakhan27]

Haha it even has a violin in it ;) xo

[lee von cleef]

the rosin keeps my hand in the bull rope, but oh how you make me sing....

[Frieda P]

But oh how you make me smile....

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

The use of gypsies and violin music immediately sets such a sublime tone. This piece is oozing with imagery, which I always enjoy. Dancing, spinning, music in the moonlight; it's all there for the enjoying.

Only suggestion: The last stanza, "frenziedly" made me stumble both times that I read this, perhaps a different word or maybe just take it out all together and have "swaying to the memories".

Overall, another lovely write.

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Friday, I changed it to frenzied, see if it works for you now...I just wanted it to have that feel.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Much better! Love it!

[Frieda P]

Mission Accomplished! ;-)

[KAOlmsted]

I love the sound of violins...you put music on every other damn piece but you couldn't find some violins to enhance this beautiful write?? You're slipping, my love ;-) xoxo

[Frieda P]

Oh geez you're right the kimmer, I wrote this when the power went out, all discombobulated between that and all the other stuff...ha, I'll find you something. xo

[Frieda P]

Just for you ;-) x

[KAOlmsted]

I have the speakers turned off because it is after midnight, but I will listen to this first thing in the A.M. Cannot wait :-D xoxo Thank you, lady ;-)

[SteveB]

I like the shift in mood that springs from the one word "grey" at the end of the second stanza. Hinted at with "ornery" but driven home by grey which sets up the final stanza.
I also like the image of the metaphorical gypsy - the secret persona hiding within our soul whom we only allow to come out at times.
Nicely done!

[Frieda P]

Thanks Steve, glad you enjoyed this one, I'm not a rhymer, trying something new.

[SteveB]

Isn't that one of the reasons to be here? To try new things. Good effort and I look forward to reading more.

[wynn]

I love the imagery you have in this poem, it totally made my morning. It strikes a chord with me (pun intended hehe) as recently I've been finding my mind fluttering about remembering strange occurrences from forever ago. Reminiscing on the past I suppose. Thanks for sharing :)

[Frieda P]

Ha very good, thanks for the visit and review hyottoko. :-)

[s y e]

"I play the violin
strumming to my heart's content
of my stories untold"

Loved these lines, they're so beautifully written. :-) So much honesty and passion, it was fantabulous. ;-P

~ Noodle.

[Frieda P]

Thanks for the awesomesauce review noodlebumnle ;-)

[Baby Ricochet]

I like it. Great job

[Frieda P]

Glad you enjoyed it Mark.