Gypsy Violin ♪

Gypsy Violin ♪

A Poem by Frieda P
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Thanks Emma Joy, your words inspired this one; "be a violin or whatever.. sweep yourself across the strings"..........

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Gypsy at night in my soul
I play the violin
strumming to my heart's content
of my stories untold

Moon winks ornery with dismay
as the furious tunes beguile,
the skies all a fluster
they've turned a dismal grey

Ravens take flight in their delusions
swaying frenzied to the memories
upon my disenchanted head
dancing darkly to my allusions

© 2013 Frieda P


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this is so poe-ish...but reminds me of sherlock holmes in Murder by Decree, playing the violin after he went to see annie crook at the mental institution and how he cried for her...even as he was playing..

the violin is a beautiful instrument but can play such sad, haunting notes.

this poem is sad and haunting.

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Frieda P

10 Years Ago

So glad it took you there jacob, the feel I was going for, thanks so much.



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I love Violen. Whereas, this poem is better than its sound :)
Nice one
Frieda :)

Cheers!
Singh :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Frieda P

10 Years Ago

So do I Singh, thanks so much.
Vikrantsingh

10 Years Ago

You're welcome dear :)
Such a lovely poem:Moon winks ornery with dismay
as the furious tunes beguile,
the skies all a fluster
they've turned a dismal grey
I like that part especially. If I were an instrument - I'd be a bagpipe. I'm already shaped like one. And I'm quite obnoxious....I just need someone to squeeze me a little.

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Lol TL, you crack me up!! I had a very Irish friend that tortured me his bagpipe music, thanks for t.. read more
A gypsy soul with untamed violin music...Two great combinations...Well done...:)

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Grazie milli :-)
Sami Khalil

10 Years Ago

You are welcome...:)
Frieda my sweet friend. whatever subject you chose you give all of us a gift...a very special gift. Very well done and the rhyming is great. Very good my friend

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Coming from the master rhymer that really means a lot, I'm really uncomfortable with rhyming in my o.. read more
Jack...

10 Years Ago

It seems you are good at whatever you do my friend.
Would be good to be a Gypsy. I always had a Gypsy soul. Good to love the night and hear a skilled violin player to take you to good places. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Frieda P

10 Years Ago

My mother always called me Gypsy Rose Lee, said she should have named me after my aunt, that was her.. read more
First off, and this may be a stupid question, but how'd you get the music note in the title? I didn't realize one could do that lol

Second off, I love the usage of gypsies in poetry--even the word and its connotation is poetic.

While I am all for descriptions, there are too many descriptive words in the last stanza "frenziedly, darkly) well ok, I guess just those but seems like too much. I'm also a bit confused as to who is under who's spell (the speaker or the gypsy... or neither). Or perhaps the gypsy and the speaker are one.

Thanks for sharing.

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Go to your character map elgantine, thanks for your thoughts here, much appreciated.
John Alexander McFadyen

10 Years Ago

What is a character map oh wise one?
Frieda P

10 Years Ago

It's available in Windows, you can copy & paste different letters, symbols and characters....
.. read more
oh wow, another enchanting write,beautifully haunting Frieda..

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Thanks Stella, so happy you enjoyed it.
Stella Armour

10 Years Ago

you are welcome Frieda..
Well music and gypsy's under a moon are some of my favorite things. ;-). This swept into my mind and stirred my thoughts. A touch of sadness combined with haunting sound. xo

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Mine too, among some other funky stuff, ha...thanks so much Red! ;-) x
I loved the dark feel of this without being too dark...Loved the first stanza and the violin...my grandson plays the violin...I cant wait until he gets better though haa...:) oh and loved the painting too.

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Thanks Rose, glad you did, I almost left it at the first stanza alone, but I tend to get wordy, and .. read more
SyberRose

10 Years Ago

Yes its still entertaining ha...hes ten

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