Music Senryu

Senryu challenge by New Yawk Steve

Satisfaction~The Rolling Stones

No girly action

even the devil knew my game

satisfaction sucks

Landslide~Fleetwood Mac

Saw my reflection

life changes of my  seasons

afraid of falling

Like A Rolling Stone~Bob Dylan

I used to be fine

now I have to compromise

on my own, unknown

Summertime~Janis Joplin

Living is breezy

no tears for the weary rich

No one can harm you

Jack & Diane~John Mellencamp

Two kids rocking on

beat goes on after it fizzles 

changes to real life

Born in the USA~Bruce Springsteen

Born American

made me kill my fellow man

Dark red, white & blue 

Nights In White Satin~Moody Blue

Hear black emptiness

Letters written, never sent

yet, still I love you

Kinks~You Really Got Me

I can't sleep at night

no clue what I am doing

you really got me

Sweet Child O'Mine~Guns & Roses

Her hair safe and warm

recalling sweet childhood

where do we go now?

A Thousand Kisses Deep~Leonard Cohen!

Streak runs a while

Seems real, yet boogie defeat

Kisses my soul deep

Reviews

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Aye! This is superb! I really like Senryu...a complete drama in 3 lines or more or less 17 syllables. And you made here many of them based on those beautiful songs.
The brilliant Frieda rocked my world!

[Frieda P]

Woo, thanks for this glowing review Dhaye! :-)

[Ken Simm.]

Music Senryu. Frieda's Work.
Brilliant idea
Wish I'd thought of it.
Very envious Bugger.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Ken, it was an exercise SteveB started off with classical movies, and then he challenged me to do a theme, of course I'd pick music, glad you enjoyed it!

[kublakhan27]

Library ;)

[Frieda P]

Are we dancing yet? ;-)

[kublakhan27]

You know it ;)

[Frieda P]

Woot! ;-)

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Love it!!!! This is perfect; all my "classic" favs portrayed. I love 'Sweet Child' and 'Born in the USA'. Very interesting concept indeed.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Friday, was harder than I expected, condensing an entire song into a Senryu isn't easy, but it was a fun challenge, glad you enjoyed it!

[Sheila Kline]

Totally awesome............love Summertime - anything Janis Joplin, but Bruce has me totally reeled in!
Great job!!!

[Frieda P]

Same here Sheila, love me some Joplin, thanks so much!

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Wow those are awesome... the last one is my favorite.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Dale, that's my favorite too.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

I got in on the challenge.

[Frieda P]

Did you, will check it out.

[Angi]

So awesome, Frieda! I have my thinking cap on! Angi~

[Frieda P]

Thanks Angi, it's not so easy but it was fun, can't wait to see what you come up with.

[Angi]

There ya go, Frieda. That was fun!

[Frieda P]

You posted it already?

[Angi]

Yup. Just a second ago. Sent you an RR.

[Frieda P]

I read it, you're quick! Good ones too.

[Angi]

Look at you go! Love the new ones. G&R? Yes!

[Frieda P]

Ha, I'm addicted Angi!

[Sirius King]

i love these, my favs are

Summertime~Janis Joplin

Born in the USA~Bruce Springsteen

[Frieda P]

Thanks Serenus, I like the Bruce one myself.

[redflutterby]

Five of my favorite songs... and an excellent collection of senryus! Guess its time for me to try to write one. Ughhh... 8-/

[Frieda P]

Let's get cracking there Red, you need a challenge, Steve's good at that? ;-)

[redflutterby]

Oh I have an idea or two up my sleeve. You know me...;-p

[Frieda P]

Ha, so get kraken ;-P

[redflutterby]

OK....now you're showing off!!! Adding more...lol....

[Frieda P]

Steve asked for the Kinks and I had to add Guns & Roses ;-P

[redflutterby]

My favorite song of thiers by the way....;-)

[SteveB]

BRAVA! I knew you could do it.

Hard to pick between Jack & Diane and Landslide.

This has been fun.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Steve, needed the diversion, it was fun, but not easy to condense an entire song in that few words, same with movies I guess....

[SteveB]

You did it very well.

[Frieda P]

Now where's Angi's?!

[Rita L. Sev]

What is Angi's topic?

[Frieda P]

I don't know, thinking on it...have any ideas? I'm not sure she's even aware of it, it was Steve's idea! ha

[Angi]

I just got back on and saw this! I didn't know I was doing these! What shall my topic be? I have never done a senryu. What are the rules?

[Rita L. Sev]

Basically, haiku without the nature theme. Senryu tend to be whimsical. So, 17 syllables, 5-7-5, no rhyme.

[Angi]

Ok, I am thinking..

[SteveB]

Well done with the Moodys. But can you do the greatest of the Brit bands, The Kinks.

[Frieda P]

Ha give me time Steve!!