~ Trace Antiquity

aimless wanderers looking for

            the sound of thunder

    metallic machinery in tow,

          baggage of decayed swatches

seeking answers

           to ancient history's secrets

       zeppelin's wail as background 

                    incessant blares

        only to be forgotten by and by

              in wastelands's echo

chants of achromatic cerebral

                      mystic channels

          passing random moonbeams

                      taunting implosion

toppling 

         disconcerted,

                    darting 

                            to

                              earth

                                    in

                                      cobalt

                                             bolts

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

It sounds like you are describing humanity's past and its history of antiquity with its thunder or decay times where mythical creatures wail in the background and all the efforts are wasted in the wastelands...
A very different from all your writes but I like it a lot...Well done...:)

[Frieda P]

Ha don't want to become predictable my friend, I really love this intriguing review, thanks so much Sami.... :-)

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure...........:)

[Frieda P]

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[Sami Khalil]

Hahahaha........................:)

[Vincent Moore]

Perfect imagery, I felt like I was a wandering alien from the past, so Universal in nature. A hint of sci-fi for sure.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Vicent, I had no clue where I was going with this piece, sci-fi seems apropos.

[rhythm&blues]

Really glad that I found this one in my rr's, the imagery in this one is superb, you have a knack for creating such elaborate emotions and imagery in your poetry. Great job.

[Zahra]

Wonderfully worded, very nice thought provoking piece

[Kristin Lee]

I love the last line and how your positioned it on the page. This piece feels so edgy and electric. I love the line about wastelands. Great job!

[Shaun Payton]

Excellent I may say. Made me think of space explorers..So much still to learn about the traces of life this universe holds.

[Samuel Jack]

i got a lot of shamanic vibes from this one, an images of humanity walking through a desert slowly evolving technology, but perhaps its all moving to quickly and everything goes chaotic, as the spiritual world collides with the material. Thats what i took from this energetic and enjoyable mystical poem.

[Barbara Walker]

Love the images that come to mind when reading this piece. darting cobalt bolts-love that!

[Leandro Mendez]

oh my God, this is so nice, too nice, fun to read, and i can tell you were having a lot of fun writing this one :)

[lee von cleef]

Toppling a real word to match "Tump" as in the truck tumped over....

[s y e]

I loved the structure of this write. That last line was amazing, love how you set it out.

Your wording is amazing, it blows me away! This was amazing, another amazing write!

~ Noodle.