~Un-Versed Life

Collaboration with Jack & Frieda

Un-versed Life

 

What would life be without poetry or song

sounds of a rabbit hole without air

dreadful thoughts, living without the magic

that transcends breathing itself

 

butterflies without wings

kites without strings

flowers with no scent

tears with no emotions

 

dust at the stem of the thorn

oh but a nightmare would be

silence in wastelands now born

crying as syllables flee

 

Staring at blank plastic walls

colored of teardrops un-cried

nothing, the sound as it calls

heavy, the depth of the sighs

 

~

 

“And those who were seen dancing were thought to be insane

by those who could not hear the music.”  Friedrich Nietzsche

~

 

A pen of empty ink a' pour

trumpets blare without a sound

pages crumbled, tossed the floor

cello strings upon the ground

 

sonnets singed on open flames

ashes float of broken verse

smoke filled eyes of clouded stains

conjured up within the curse

 

zephyr's without atmosphere

words sans color or meaning

memories held captive without a melody

only final good byes & no hellos

 

hard to imagine how it would be

if that first note was never played

the first rhyme never written

darkness within creativity

Reviews

[Astro]

What a pitiful picture you two have weaved. These two sections were my favorites, and seemed to me to invoke such sad visions.
"dust at the stem of the thorn
oh but a nightmare would be
silence in wastelands now born
crying as syllables flee

Staring at blank plastic walls
colored of teardrops un-cried
nothing, the sound as it calls
heavy, the depth of the sighs"

Nice collaboration guys.

[Frieda P]

Sorry I missed your review, but since you picked both of Jack's stanza's, not so much ;-) Thanks Astro....

[Astro]

I wasn't trying to, you know I love your style.

[Angi]

This is so very well done. You two work beautifully together, you know. This world would be one big old bland bowl of plain oatmeal without poetry and music! Angi~

[Frieda P]

Ha so true, nobody likes bland oatmeal, thanks Angi!

[Jack...]

I don't like oatmeal period. but I like Angi's review, nothing bland about it. Thank you so much Angi.

[Annabelle Lee]

Mr Jack and the lovely Ms Frieda, you guys make a fantastic team, and life would not be life without the fine arts, music and literature are both human necessities

[Frieda P]

We do seem to jive together well, thanks Annabelle.

[Jack...]

Thank you so much Annabelle. Frieda is a dream to work with.

[Kleio13]

excellent write on truth of life without poetry Frieda

[Frieda P]

Thanks Kleio, Jack helped with this inspiration....

[Jack...]

The enitre piece was Frieda's idea, don't let her tell you other wise. I just sharpen her pencils for her. Hey, someone's got to do it.

[Frieda P]

Very funny Jack, were the class clown by any chance?

[Jack...]

Voted most likely to end up a broke poet

[Frieda P]

Hahaha touche!

[Dr. Wood ?]

another fine Jafrie composition.....hat would life be without Jack and Frieda..That's what i want to know

[Frieda P]

Hmmm what's up doc with putting Jack first is what I want to know?! ;-)

[Dr. Wood ?]

yeah..I thought of that....but Friack..sounded a tad harsh.....like something you might use to fry acorns in

[Jack...]

I like the way you wrote it originally. I don't see anything wrong with it. :) Thanks so much Doc.

[Frieda P]

Pfft, when is that challenge, don't expect my vote Jack! ;-P

[annie lee]

I see poetry as the lonely bird singing in the dark, a candle burning. Thank god we found out about this, and expression can burst into blossoms of myriad colors.

[Frieda P]

Your poetic response is muchly appreciated my friend, thanks minichinz...

[annie lee]

Thank you, Frieda

[Rita L. Sev]

What would life be without poetry or song? - So dismal...

Mankind was meant to make music, to create poetry and art. Without these things, there would be a void not just in men's hearts, but a Universal Emptiness - and we would not survive...

Deep and tragic thoughts this morning, conjured by your collaborative piece - keep spreading Poetry, dear friends!

[Frieda P]

Definite void, I concur, thanks so much Rita!

[Jack...]

Thank you so much Rita, a world without music would be like WC without you and Frieda, rather dull.

[Leslie Philibert]

Like this a lot, and the quote from Nietzsche is great ( a writer that I like a lot, although I have to admit his aphoristic style is all to all men). This has a nice hippy feeling.

[Frieda P]

I like that, 'nice hippie feeling'...thanks so much Leslie, he has some great quotes indeed.

[Cassie]

You two work well together, keep brightening our days with your wonderful writes. I loved this one, what would be the world like without all this things, without tears...good job my dear friend Frieda and Jack

[Frieda P]

Grazie mille Cassie, jazzed you liked our collaboration.

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much cassie.

[shallimarRose]

Another nicely done collaboration of poetic hearts and minds. I love the picture you chose it really set the mood here and the quote was placed perfectly. There has been music and verse since the beginning of time..... but what if??? nicely done. xo

[Frieda P]

I know, I can't imagine 'what if'...luckily we never have to know, thanks shallimar! x

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Rose. I could not even use my imagination to understand what it would be like.

[SyberRose]

thought provoking indeed...and exquisitely executed; I loved the quote you inserted and
also the piano with cobwebs...and if someone could play that piano it would beautify the walls, more then a coat of paint...Enjoyed your collaboration as always...Rose:)

[Frieda P]

Such a lovely review Rose, thanks muchly! :-)