The better to see you with~

The better to see you with~

A Poem by Frieda P

You bit into
 the meat of me
spit me out 
   you didn't realize
this leo lioness
 has sharpened claws
thought yourself,
   prettier too                              
as you puffed
  your wide chest
I left a gap
  wide enough
for another
 foolish woman
who follows me
 to actually see
what's behind
  those chops
you lick so
methodically

© 2013 Frieda P


Author's Note

Frieda P
Fire Lioness Art by Alex Barrera

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"for another

foolish woman

who follows me

to actually see

what's behind

those chops

you lick so

methodically"
I take this as a jab of sorts or a victory sign at someone who thought he, she can hurt you with their claws or as I take it as insults and you proved to them you are the winner at the end for you can be a lioness...A powerful write...Thank you for sharing...:)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

10 Years Ago

All fairy tales have some truth to them Sami, I bet any number of people have lived this tale. Than.. read more
Sami Khalil

10 Years Ago

OK. You are welcome...:)



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HA!! Dare I say this is brilliant?? Wouldnt it be great to leave those evil jerks marked so the next potential victim can avoid them? Lol... ROARRRRR..

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Ha I knew you'd appreciate this one! All 'evil jerks' should be marked, yep... ;-) Love the ROARRRR.. read more
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DrD
My God you're absolutely brutal when you want to be. The work is an exciting read and the message is all too clear. Enjoyable but oddly fearsome.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Haha, what do they say Doc, all's fair in love & war? Thanks!
Letting the enemy make the first is a great strategy, then you know what you are up against and how to counter it.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

10 Years Ago

You coulda told me that sooner Dale, thanks muchly!
The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)

10 Years Ago

Opppps my bad :p
You are a mischievous one, Frieda! Don't mess with the fire signs.....and I speak from experience. I am an Aries! :) Sounds like you put some man in his place with this one. I enjoyed it. Lydi**

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Woo better watch out for you too, I'm actually a pretty tolerant person, till you push me too far, t.. read more
What's been done is a public service after all! He's been marked for all eternity...Go Leos!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Haha lovely to have you on the cheering squad!! Give me an L.........................
Once bitten - but you have bitten back! This wolf will end up in a pack of one, without even Granny for company... :) A Devilish delight, Frieda!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Lol, without Granny even! Thanks Rita..... ;-)
Yes, avoid the wrath of the Leo at all costs, point well-taken ;P I love that image of the gap in the puffed chest...this piece speaks volumes to the importance of balancing temptation and logic...nice work Mrs.R ;)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

LOL You opened the door for a comment there Mrs.R, but I'll give you a break ;)
Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Haha maybe I shouldn't respond after having two drinks...hmm three maybe ;-)
kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Hahaha you've already lost count? ;)
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Dye
This is awesome. Expose you for who you are, great "fairy tale".

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Thanks Dye...after reading your's earlier, I can see we're cut from the same cloth....
You may have been bitten but you weren't swallowed by this fiendish beast, and you had the goodness of heart to warn his next innocent victim about the dangers of this folly !

An inspiring, creative poem Frieda, with much detail and imagery in so few but pertinent words ! And fantastic graphics to compliment your alluring choice of words !!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Thanks Tom...twice bitten so I had to get my Moxy on, glad you enjoyed my little rant!
there ya go! eat or be eaten - and some of those wolfie types don't realize when they're messing with a bigger set of teeth than they possess. Git 'em!

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Exactly Tam, you know the drill!

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If you want to know me, read my poetry, it's all in there. I am a mother of three sons (my finest moments) a sister, a survivor and a little bit crazy. I lost my beloved sister to suicide, so you'll.. more..

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